Rhetoric vs. Toretto[Tor Wins 5-0]

[IAmRhetoric]

10 bars.

Bars due tonight 4/14/2015

[Donald Trump]

Check

[IAmRhetoric]

This ain't a poetry jam so don't bring Haiku's, alright dude?
Your record don't mean shit when all you got is light 1-2's,
Matter fact, I just wanted an excuse to fight dude, to spite you,
If you get Diesel'd up you can crash and burn like Paul,
Less Fast and Furious, more fat and serious,
You a fraud and you bad at it like Better Call Saul,
I could get you stabbed behind bars like Walter White,
This ain't the Price is Right but you could get spun for the right price,
This actor ain't portrayed on TV shows, but you don't see him in bright lights.

[Donald Trump]

Faggot you know I'm superior, I'm just here to remind you you're wack
Rhetoric'll question...whose better?? But we already know the answer to that
I'm a savage with raps, challenging me? I'll have you pay for this
The consequences will be dire, rhe.. So much this pussy will begin writing in his
I'm like Tom Brady, age gracefully sonning cats and I know that troubles you
Since you're more like Cutlery... Since you're only good for feeding me W's
This won't be a fair fight.. You see all of my punches come equipped w/ brilliance
So you'll be quick to see R KO'd without a randy Orton appearance
^and I know Amen has prolly done that, but I'm just trying to son cat
I won't even throw a punch w/ this last bar I've spent enough time on this fag

[Joe Boston]

Rhetoric

This ain't a poetry jam so don't bring Haiku's, alright dude?
Your record don't mean shit when all you got is light 1-2's,
not much impact in this bar basic punch

Matter fact, I just wanted an excuse to fight dude, to spite you,
If you get Diesel'd up you can crash and burn like Paul,
Less Fast and Furious, more fat and serious,
You a fraud and you bad at it like Better Call Saul,
I could get you stabbed behind bars like Walter White,
This ain't the Price is Right but you could get spun for the right price,
This actor ain't portrayed on TV shows, but you don't see him in bright lights.
the rest of these bars man the structure and just the whole rhyme scheme and punches came off audio based for me. I could see this being a better verse if this was an audio.

Tay

Faggot you know I'm superior, I'm just here to remind you you're wack
Rhetoric'll question...whose better?? But we already know the answer to that
ok nameplay

I'm a savage with raps, challenging me? I'll have you pay for this
The consequences will be dire, rhe.. So much this pussy will begin writing in his
lol creative flip on the nameplay

I'm like Tom Brady, age gracefully sonning cats and I know that troubles you
Since you're more like Cutlery... Since you're only good for feeding me W's
wasn't really feeling the execution on this finisher pretty much overdosing on nameplays also Cutlery was a good attempt just bar fell flat

This won't be a fair fight.. You see all of my punches come equipped w/ brilliance
So you'll be quick to see R KO'd without a randy Orton appearance
basic nameplay I don't see any creativity in just first name initial flips

^and I know Amen has prolly done that, but I'm just trying to son cat
I won't even throw a punch w/ this last bar I've spent enough time on this fag
no

Well Tay actually had a text formatted verse but he overdosed on the nameplay usage first two bars were good then I felt he just landed misses. Rhet needs to work on his text battle format. the way he formatting his bars came off audio based to me even some of his punches also.

V/Tay

[Flying Carcass]

This ain't a poetry jam so don't bring Haiku's, alright dude?
Your record don't mean shit when all you got is light 1-2's,
lmao real shit he do be havin light 1-2's
Matter fact, I just wanted an excuse to fight dude, to spite you,
If you get Diesel'd up you can crash and burn like Paul,
wheres the rhyme?
Less Fast and Furious, more fat and serious,
You a fraud and you bad at it like Better Call Saul,
oh there it is, i thought you said not to write in poetry format?
I could get you stabbed behind bars like Walter White,
This ain't the Price is Right but you could get spun for the right price,
This actor ain't portrayed on TV shows, but you don't see him in bright lights.
im done lol no man PM me to elevate

vs

Faggot you know I'm superior, I'm just here to remind you you're wack
Rhetoric'll question...whose better?? But we already know the answer to that
cool nameplay, solid wording.
I'm a savage with raps, challenging me? I'll have you pay for this
The consequences will be dire, rhe.. So much this pussy will begin writing in his
lol this is on some pavillion o type shit, forced wordplay but funny how you decided to come up with it
I'm like Tom Brady, age gracefully sonning cats and I know that troubles you
Since you're more like Cutlery... Since you're only good for feeding me W's
ehh not feeling this altogether dagel
This won't be a fair fight.. You see all of my punches come equipped w/ brilliance
So you'll be quick to see R KO'd without a randy Orton appearance
ok here, could have been used better
^and I know Amen has prolly done that, but I'm just trying to son cat
I won't even throw a punch w/ this last bar I've spent enough time on this fag
this might just be LOTB

One sided here, Vote: ToReTtTo

[Blind Devil]

This ain't a poetry jam so don't bring Haiku's, alright dude?
Your record don't mean shit when all you got is light 1-2's,
Matter fact, I just wanted an excuse to fight dude, to spite you,
Nice flow but it came off more like a statement than a punch
If you get Diesel'd up you can crash and burn like Paul,
Less Fast and Furious, more fat and serious,
You a fraud and you bad at it like Better Call Saul,
No. Messy and stretched way out
I could get you stabbed behind bars like Walter White,
This ain't the Price is Right but you could get spun for the right price,
This actor ain't portrayed on TV shows, but you don't see him in bright lights.
Not sure about this three line style, seems to stretch your concepts out too much.

Wasn't feeling the style. It messed with your concepts too much and ruined the punchlines. Try sticking with the two line bars, shorter and more direct.

vs.

Faggot you know I'm superior, I'm just here to remind you you're wack
Rhetoric'll question...whose better?? But we already know the answer to that
Lol pretty nice.
I'm a savage with raps, challenging me? I'll have you pay for this
The consequences will be dire, rhe.. So much this pussy will begin writing in his
Diary, I get it, could've been a bit more impactful.
I'm like Tom Brady, age gracefully sonning cats and I know that troubles you
Since you're more like Cutlery... Since you're only good for feeding me W's
Haha, righteous.
This won't be a fair fight.. You see all of my punches come equipped w/ brilliance
So you'll be quick to see R KO'd without a randy Orton appearance
Awesome, lotb.
^and I know Amen has prolly done that, but I'm just trying to son cat
I won't even throw a punch w/ this last bar I've spent enough time on this fag
Filler

Pretty nice. Wish you would've dropped a legitimate finisher but I can see why you didn't.

Vote Dom for a much heavier verse.

[Not N Nice]

Rhetoric
1. The setup bar is decent, punchline lacks punchline
2. Aiight concept, I guess, but too many red flags, lack of rhymes being one
"everything else". You had somewhat potential with the concepts
But the way you use them needs upgrading

Magnum
1. That's a decent nameplay
2. Kind of a reach, but the point gets across
3. Ehh...
4. Reach... Average at best... You slacked a bit
5. Explaining your slack I see... Still weak

Mvgt the verse with better commentary... Rhet needs to form punches better
The concepts there, but... Mag' wins

[iSpaz]

Nothing

Vs.

Faggot you know I'm superior, I'm just here to remind you you're wack
Rhetoric'll question...whose better?? But we already know the answer to that
I'm a savage with raps, challenging me? I'll have you pay for this
The consequences will be dire, rhe.. So much this pussy will begin writing in his

^dope

^and I know Amen has prolly done that, but I'm just trying to son cat
I won't even throw a punch w/ this last bar I've spent enough time on this fag

^ you were that confident man?


Vote tor

Rhet I can see the wheels spinning. There is alot of potential with then bars, some good concepts and thought out. Just gotta work on execution.