Originally Posted by
Illustrious.
* This is my SS piece, dude no showed so i'd like criticism please, leave feed. will have links soon.
“Your time is limited, so don’t waste it living someone else’s life “
Unique and Unparalleled, mind state twists like a carousel
Excellent one liner here. I love the unparalelled/carousel rhyme
Shit was ill.
Independent and Self-sustaining, maintaining life to gain and battle well
This was rough, not! near as smooth of wording..kinda forced in my
opinion
Following in footsteps wrecks freedom, disconnects what you believe in
Intellect will intersect with achievements, leading you on paths for succeeding
Dope bar. Smooth and decent vocabulary usage. It also hits the nail on the
head as far as the topic goes
Proceeding without guidance, reliance means opportunity for impeding
Conceding, rather craft your own words than follow what you‘re reading
This was a cool philosophical sort of vibe. Shows some creativity.
Feelings; allow yourself to roll with those, never bottle it & don’t oppose
Compose your own tricks like blowing O’s, being a follower is risky like an overdose
Eh. I wasn't a big fan of this bar. Solid mechanically though
Leadership; a quality in life that people have forgotten, it’s rotten & you’re still eating it
Feebleness, people take the cards their dealt & deal with it instead of dealing shit
This was maad weak. I did not enjoy this, its like for a second you
lost sight of the overall concept and just rhymed.
Yes, dealing shit. Be a dealership, then you’ll realize you can control your own agency
Time is limited; it’s constructed into the permanent state of fate the lord’s paved for we
I'm not trying to be a downer but Imho this was rough
Most are blatantly, shamefully quick to let others select the roads to drive, impatiently
Instead of patiently & graciously waiting for opportunities that are better unmistakably
This bar was solid. Enjoyed it
Quit wasting time, that’s the basic line. It’s time to break the bind & make up your mind
View the road to success & make the right turn. If you take a left then you’re painfully blind
This was dope. I can easily say one of your top bars
Open your eyes, it’s finally the moment to view that others have been controlling you
If you got an intelligent mind state then you’ll realize it isn’t lies & it’s totally true
This was ok, it did convey what was intended
They got you in a choke hold, hoping you’ll quit resisting & won’t stop until you’re going blue
That’s why we got to continue to fight for our independent lives, strive & and give it everything inside
This was solid
Entwined in our heads is the power to devour cowards & design plans to be the boss
Use our minds, stay focused & never be hopeless. Use your heart & stick behind your thoughts
Enjoyed this
Because others’ opinions will skew your judgements & they’ll love it when you’re lost
If you don’t stop wasting your time living someone else’s life, then your own life will be the cost.
A pretty solid closer I must say and ultimately hits the topic straight on
-Illustrious