Yeah i agree this was a good piece, it made a good read i thought, it flowed well through out the piece when i was reading it, very creative, good vocab, content was good too, overall it was a good piece, keep dropping.
Yeah i agree this was a good piece, it made a good read i thought, it flowed well through out the piece when i was reading it, very creative, good vocab, content was good too, overall it was a good piece, keep dropping.
thanx bruv.
still upping
nice......it was straight up hot but there coulda been more rhyming at the end of the lines but overall it was perfect
nice n creative n i like the way yall stayd on topic n worked together an how it showed that everything the creator would creat the destroyer would destroy
nice peice *MADD PROPZ*
O... K... well i have to agree this was a very original concept...
Props and yea i give it like 9/10 in that categorie....
But, some of your rhymes were just plain off...sorry...
"On the first day I spoke, the world appeared,
Remarkable, only water, no land as far the eyes could reach."
"Prepare for the fourth, as I pop the sun with my fork
And eat the moon's cheese with my teeth and my own jaws"
In addition my feeling is that emcees shouldnt use topical words to stretch a line...
"On the fifth, I'll tip toxins deep within the water mist
And submit chemicals to the birds, death torture sick
On day six i almost created everything living and breathing,
Humans, but also feelings , hate, love, so retrieving."
"death torture sick"?? does this mean something grammatically or are you just trying to put these 3 words together for effect?
"hate, love, so retrieving." please break this down cuz it literally means......umm...ermmm....uh...nothing.
this could have been much better... i give it a 5/10 for style...sorry...
{Peace}
Hence Forward
^^^thanx
'death torture sick' is the relation in the words cus they relate to each other.
still upping this
WerdiZZLe, ah well
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Very Unique and you presented it and write to the topic outstandably well...Pz...
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