Do Not Fear

[Iglosone]

Do Not Fear

We are as we are, nothing more or less.
A piece of a puzzle that never fit.
Every edge and corner crammed on a table.
Cast away, slowly covered in dust.
I wonder and lust for answers I cannot know.
We cannot grow under the rays of normality.
What is normal is normally abnormal?
Perhaps every day is a portal?
Maybe every night was a dream?
Was the last sight I saw nothing more,
Than a dream I dreamed in a dream?
Am I as you see or as you are?
Questions really have no answer.
And answers often fall short of the truth.
Since youth the quest is hard.
A jungle of warriors and prey.
It's man and woman, over man and women.
Many try yet still lie behind a prison.
So hold tight the key with-in.
The unlock the hollowed doors of the soul.
Follow the corridors untraveled.
Do not fear what you do not know;
You are the same as every other soul.
And every soul is the same as you.




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[Iglosone]

Nothing huh

[oatmeal]

this was an interesting read. There were sections of rhythm stacked on each other, gave it a bounce throughout, you knew when to throw in the breaks. As far as the content, it was a good summation of "the big questions" in a lot of ways, though not so spiritual by any means. Everyone questions their reality in one way or another, and the concepts of "self" and "the other" are both inherit and inert, it seems. I liked how you "answered" them, in the sense that you said there are no answers. Though, I wonder how the poem would be if it just attempted to question, would be an interesting exercise. Anyway, I'm rambling now, but it was a nice read.

[Iglosone]

thank you sir

I will return the favor

I've never tried poetry but kind of enjoyed that

[Jukon]

This was cool, pretty smooth read. I liked the rhythmic feeling this had. I think I enjoyed your concept the best though, and the execution was pretty brilliant. I liked the, 'inquisitive' manner, it was a nice touch. Nothing else to say really, I enjoyed it. You should do poetry more often

[halfshavenbanana]

Overall you have a steady grasp over what you are saying/trying to convey. The level of language in this took a concise stance - meaning, in my eyes, a simplicity in philosophy. Quality lines in this, and a spirit worth the short quest.

[Iglosone]

another up

[SquareRootGenius]

What I like about poetry, you don't have to rhyme to make it a good one, I actually enjoyed this read, it gives you a different perspective on life, different is always good
Very nice concept. If you don't do poetry that often I suggest you defintely take time in doing one

[lostpoet]

Don't take this the wrong way but the only part that I really liked at all was:

'We are as we are, nothing more or less.
A piece of a puzzle that never fit.
Every edge and corner crammed on a table.
Cast away, slowly covered in dust.
I wonder and lust for answers I cannot know.
We cannot grow under the rays of normality.'

After that I got lost. The question marks threw me off. It seemed as though you were using statements as questions. I don't know, like you were trying too hard to be philosophical. That's is one of the difficult things about reading someones piece apposed to them performing it, it can lose some of the intended message. That said, I do like where I think you were going.