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    6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

    I’m alone in a cage, fearing the future and baring the rage,
    Parents astray, banished me away, and I burden the shame,
    Got a bad name for myself, won’t vanish or deteriorate,
    No fate, no path to take, can’t make the mattress break,
    Even though I’m scrunching punches and throwing them at the mat,
    Then after that, find myself in bad health imagine that,
    Without a hope to grasp, without a life to lead,
    The family ends at me, ain’t no more apples on tree,
    My happiness deceives me and covers up the truth,
    Like a veil over the sadness, like the tiles upon the roof,
    And I have thought it through, like a thousand times a two,
    An exit out this anger, a hanging noose will have to do,
    I can’t get answers from you; you don’t appear to exist,
    Because trust me I’ve prayed, but still its come to this,
    Look what I’ve done to this life, bludgeoned and stuck within,
    I’m distraught and left in shatters, a grenade without a pin,
    Pull up the bedside table; I’m able to stand on top,
    It ain’t too stable, and it may fall, so I’m already ready to drop,
    So be steady don’t rock, I’m getting sweaty a lot,
    Take my last breath; see the petty life that I got,
    The clear confetti stops, falling from the ducts of my eyes,
    My demise, not like people give a fuck if I die,
    Don’t mean much if I cry, there is no moral like the fable thinks,
    The cable swings, I descent without a pair of angel wings.

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    Re: 6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

    You need links.

    All in all, a very decent drop. Looking smooth Lyric-wise and the imagery was pretty cool.

    8.5/10 Stay up


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    Re: 6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

    cheers for feedback, this one is a little older so im not saying its my best.

    second link very soon

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    Werd. Feed on some of my work? Check out "In The Beginning"


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    Re: 6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

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    Re: 6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

    uppin ^^^

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    verry dope u killed it not meaning anything but i just wrote a rap song
    an wonderin who would like to do a collab not now but later check in
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    Re: 6feetdeep - Suicide (Quite Old)

    hmm, I read your other drop and fucked with it so I thought to peep something else

    def. got a similar style between the two, same type of lyrical approach, which is fine

    with this piece I did feel like I knew where it was headed quite a long time before it did, but hey...so the title would have man believe. This was decent, I thought some of the introverted segments were interesting and others a little stale

    for what it was though, i do not have a lot of problems with it...an see a small difference in ability between the two pieces, I feel.
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