A dyin Breed

[Knolige]

Yeah just chillin to this beat so I got to writing

From my blood to my bone to the flesh that makes up my complexion.
I'm flowin into the mic wit perplexion, you can question my plots.
But suggestion or not, the thoughts are congested with the knowledge i've got.
Intelligent emcees, a dyin breed, the beast alive in me tries to feed.
On the conscience with the rhymes i speak, til it dies or sleeps.
This demon inside of me is caged to the page.
With the bars that i write. my heart on a mic.
Isn't far outta sight, but my brain is hard at work.
24 7 365 to write a verse, this hip hop is my life.
So burry me wit a mic, cuz once i go it'll be my grave yard.
But til my casket drops, i'mma be at this pad.
Spittin any design that i have, in my cerebral cortex.
Got the record spinnin as i'm spittin so twisted it's a vortex.
Cuz i'm defined by these rhymes you see me write to speak.
I can't be anything other than what i am an emcee a dyin breed.

[moose35]

Off the hook lyrically, I really liked your transitions dude. Your flow was a little off, but good piece, I liked it.

[Knolige]

links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...107/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...228/index.html

[emcee danger]

i liked it. transitions were good in most parts, but the flow fell off throughout it in my opinion. in no way am i hating; i enjoyed the read. keep up the writing bro.

[IDGAF]

Pretty cool piece. Maybe try to smooth out the flow a little more. Also, I noticed that sometimes your lines just don't rhyme, maybe it's my pronunciation but I just didn't find some of your rhymes dude. But you know, hip hop is a muscle, the more you work it, the better you get. The more you write you can only get better. Keep it up man.

[LicketySplit96]

damn yo, like everyone said you had mad good transitions. definitely good verse man, you had some tight rhymes in there and it didn't seem like nothin was forced. 9/10 man keep droppin imma look out for your shit.

rtf please if you get a chance homie
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...254/index.html

[Knolige]

uppin