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    Life...

    This Is My Take On How My Life Is At The Moment... (I Just Needed To Vent After A Few Things Came To My Attention)


    Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
    Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
    Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
    Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

    Set It Up Dawg… Show All These People What It’s Like To Be You

    Sometimes You Come Out Of Life On Top
    Other Times You Feel Like Life Just Wont Stop
    Saw My Life Through Others And Felt It Wasn’t Worth Saving
    Few Weeks Back Had THe Life Everyone Was Craving
    Then The World Started Buggin And Shit Hit The Fan
    Not Gonna Be Like Last Time Where I Saw My Problems And Ran
    Gonna Stand Up And Take This Shit Like A Man
    You Just Don’t Know How Long The Days Seem
    Life Aint Worth Living, It Seems Just 2 Crazy
    Man Even My Dog Was Right There To Play Me
    Come On Dawg, Im Looking Now Take The Knife
    Is Shit Worth Staying.. Whats The Reason To My Life

    Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
    Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
    Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
    Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

    Throw The Punchs At Those Fake Ass Players In The Game…

    Fake Friends Try To Make Amends
    See Right Through Their Shit
    Already Been Through This Bit
    Just A New Cast To Reflect The Past
    Seems Like Lifes Moving Just To Fast
    Just Waiting TO Beat The Feeling Out Of The Past
    Should I Just Wait And Tempt Fate
    Or Should I Take The Detour To Ignore The Debate
    Living Through All This Pain And Disdain
    Who Am I Supposed to Blame
    When All The Characters Seem The Same
    Should I Take My Pain Out On The Game
    Cock The 9 Back Don’t Force Me To Attack
    Load Up The Mack… Say You Want To Stab Me In The Back
    Get Back At Everyone For Their Overdues
    Leave This Shit All Over The News
    Wanna Fuck With Me Now Dawg…?

    Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
    Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
    Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
    Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

    What About That Girl… Uhhhh Whats Her Name….

    Quit Playing I Know What Your Saying
    What You Say It Just Aint Weighing…
    You Said We’d Be Bonnie And Clyde Was There Something I Was Missing
    Remove Her From The Picture Like A Long Lost Revision
    This Aint Math But I’m Always Up For Division
    Came Into This World As Just One
    Thought I Would Multiply But Then That Was Undone
    Going To Give You One Last Chance
    Give Me A Call Then We Can Subtract Those Pants
    Heres Your Last Chance To Get On Your Knees
    Not To Beg For Forgiveness But To Suck On These

    Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
    Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
    Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
    Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

    Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
    Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
    Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
    Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

    Lifes A Bitch, Fuck It...
    Last edited by Throwaway123; September 7th, 2003 at 03:51 AM
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    Can I Get Some Feedback Please
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    *breathes in*
    ok here we go
    the flow was easy to find, and while reading it i made a stupid little beat in my head and it worked well... its a modification of Frontin' by the neptunes... anyways

    Cuz Heres Your Last Chance To Get On Your Knees
    Bitch Please Want A Piece Better Suck On These

    easily the most played line i ever heard.. try to not use that one again.. besides that the originality was there and the approach was good 2.

    the vocab could have been better... try to get a few more syllabulls per wor.. i think on average u had 3 syls as the highest.

    other than that i liked it... 8/10

    that that how you want

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    Thanks Alot Man, Ya It Was Just A Vent And Also I Updated Your Line YOu WEre Talking About It I Just Read Over It And It Hit Me, But Ya I Will Try Better Vocab If I Wasn't In A State Of Anger, Now I Cooled Off And Shits Good Again,
    Uppin... For More Feedback...
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    Okie This Is My 2nd Open Mic And I'd Appreciate It If I Could Get Some Feedback Please.. Word...
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    yup...this was a nice drop...I wouldn't reply to it if it wasn't...had good flow and a good message...I liked it...can you do me a favor and hit up my 4 new open mics?????? feedback would be appreciated...

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    nice drop man real nice i liked it nice work

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    Yo.. Lets Up This One More Time To Get Some Final Feedback I Would Like If Comments Kept It Near The Top Instead Of Me Uppin It... Word...
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    yo straight up you got a great concept style and way to convey this came with fire and burned anything in its' path.
    only complaint verses were a lil short
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Yo, I liked this drop and the way you came at it. I see you in the frontlines too, so keep all that shit up. Good Open Mic drop and the flow was there. Easy to get along with on the flow so points there.

    Hey man, hit this shit up if you have the time:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=77669

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    Okie.. I Want To Know If U Guys Think This Shit Was Ill Should I Try Another Or Just Stick To Battlin Or What Y'all Think?
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    this was ill,a little simple but still wasnt that bad,u do need more vocab,a few multis woldnt hurt either,other than that it was mad felt,keep spittin.


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