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    Blessed With Abilities

    Blessed With Abilities

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    "Some" people have to go on a Journey to get attention
    hands finger complextions, so they could get mental messages
    cause your eyes arent working right, everyday your just losing sight
    foggy pictures aint gettin light, and your wishes increasing height
    Wonder whats in the kitchen, sit down and patiently listen
    For your dear mama to answer, but shes already now slippen
    into her thoughts, in the dark, stick her head in the pot
    But suicide will not, help the life of your tot
    Cause he's just fighting to stop, to choke himself with a sock
    so all he does is just cry, tears dripping side to side
    hoping that all these tears, could probably clear up his eyes
    but now it hurts from the eardrum, and your waiting to hear some
    Badnews, " I think your going deaf from the ears son "
    Now you cant even hear this, gotta feel with your fingers
    lyrics that come from the wealthy mind of your favorite singer
    Its not the same anymore, life just aint fair anymore
    why did it have to be you, God put on Earth to endure
    all of these pains, reaching some stages like the insane
    take out a gun, and point the pistol hole to your brain
    why wont you click it? I guess your mind has bravery in it
    you wanna survive, you can tell the God that you did it
    and just to help em out, waste on of your meaningful minutes

    So lets just...
    Close our eyes, think about
    reaching out, to the...
    lives of people, many voices are lethal
    and no rejoice till the feel it, just make a choice and go steer it
    these help cries we hear it, its time to boost up their spirits

    So lets just...
    take the time, put ourselves
    in their shoes, walk around
    in a town, with suprising moods
    when vibrates will move, you gotta feel it to hear it
    your either blind or deaf, life is what we all gotta cherish
    Blessed with abilities...

    Cherish your life...

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    Re: Blessed With Abilities

    crap the pic didnt work right....

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    Re: Blessed With Abilities

    I can see you tried to elevate on ya flow and it shows... the internals were simple one-syllable rhymes but its a start. As always the vocab was good. The only thing is that while the multis helped ya flow still seems a little mechanical. Like you'd have to rap at the exact same pace forever for it to work. If you have to, try to cut down on the syllables... like, keep each line at around 11-13

    Still, this is a step up from ya last work. O/A: 7.75/10

    Stay up

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    Re: Blessed With Abilities

    uppin some more...

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