-Black Curtains-

[Ch@s3]

Atonishing performance, inevitable endorsements/
a fashion sense, or blood paved vents/
behind these black steel rods, lays a face unseen and odd/
forecloser for those that can't apply for this job/
maroon red stains, silent other then the sound of loose change/
or is it loose chains, red steel from the battered brains/
shhhh...it speaks shhhh....it breaths/
silents as it eats, the sound off jaws clattering as it feasts/
i am the animal, i feast on your health/
i am the black curtains, which speak of them self/
behind these black curtains i shall hide/
behind these black curtains your eyes shall blind/

[F.A.M.]

^i like it but i think you should drop it in the poetry joint
nice flow..nice topic ,struture..good read...keep doin ya shit!!