N.s.

[Dayvid Aimz]

i am nothing special I'm not free
to tell the truth I dislike being me
I play these games for the sake of fun
Imperfect perfections so I hate the nuns
I wanna convert could you make me one...maybe son
we call him father but did he birth us?
how could he create something that feels so worthless
so perterbed so unethical...so irregular
take this life of mines i want a better one
show me the way cause now I just Protest in vain
enveloped by the most Grotesque of Pains
its called indifference and I'm lost inside
I'm more lost than the kids that did columbine
a column of lines that resign into the unknown
I was once infantine spiritually now I've grown
Honed these latent talents but it makes me sad
to see concepts I birthed call another man DAD
if you reading this and you know who you are
I wanna murder all you plagiarizers Swear to God
you make me feel like nothing special you addiction
You make me feel like nothing special stupid affliction
you make me feel like nothing special cause I let you
but Now I must put this bullet into your temple
I don't know why I chose to befriend you
Doubt likes when I'm weak and hates to see me shine
laughs when I take downers to get a deeper Mind
laughs at my attempts to get rehabiliation
and laughs when I create more Humiliation
deep inside I feel like NOTHING SPECIAL.
N.S.

[Mach II]

First things first, poems don't always have to rhyme. Sometimes they do, and it works, sometimes they don't, and it works. Personally I feel like sometimes a rhyme scheme and be really restrictive. That's what hapenned here. Your poem had alot of emotion and in that sense, it seemed very genuine. But, at the same time, I feel like the emotion would become more potent if you didnt try and fit in in a specific rhyme scheme, line in and line out. Because when you're writing about something deep, sometimes mechanical boundaries don't serve any real function, you know?

[Kaotic Theory]

basic in my opinion ,not that origiNal nothing made me go aWWWW, emotion was kool,but imagery was basic i dont know maybe its just me....not my interest style of read, it was decent iguess but could of been better