exercise (quick freestyle)

[the_origin]

try to mimic the greats rep is at stake
lyrical weaponry strait for confrontin the fake
theory and practice u pick it up and put it in place
either mentally elevate or relinquish ya space
fear not my existence is simply hip hop assistance
welcome competition but more interested in my vision
so i relay my sickness to anyone who will listen
wit hopes to reach the masses similar to religion
dip into my intuition entranced by the rhythm
navigate the system succesfully its the best of me
ground breaking flow and im cuttin the ribbon
testament to my ephagy i gave u the recipe
thug with a destructive nature professional baker
the lesser in succesion professin to be the greater
reality the wager traded in for paper
motivated by currency thats how the hood made us

[Ink Poyzin]

here im gettin' to the point with this...

overall your vocab - it was good. The flow it just
lacked. I'd say to try working on some multi's.
See you throw a bunch of rhyming words
together... Which is bad, in my view. It takes
the challenge of Hip-Hop away.. I'm serious, you'll
notice a big difference in your flow. And the others,
they will, too..So I hope the next time I check a piece
out from you, you have it all figured out.. See you around..

[the_origin]

good lookin