Im a King ( Unfinished )

[RiZe]

Hook
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat

Verse:1
You kno ima king
Step to me an i put my gat to ya spleen
Blow ya back
Like Joe Crack, Then ya lean
So boss wit this flow
Hyphy dumbs what i go
So clean wit my team
When i hit tha scene
Rappin fo paper
Smashin off in a scraper
Fucked ya wifey n told her " cya lata aligata "

Hook
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat

Verse:2
Now im back for seconds
Bein able to spit like me is a belssin
You try n bite n imma grab my Smith n Wesson
Leave ya brain hangin low
Wit ya blood on floor
Think im frontin? Then call my bluff
Then i blast ya stuff
Show ya crew that u aint tuff
Been pushin bricks since i was old enough
Grew up in tha Dope Game so i kno this stuff

Hook
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat
Im tha king of these streets
White tees an nikes on my feet
You kno im always strap wit my heat

was gonna add 1 more verse, but if i get bad feed an ppl sayin its whack i wont waste my time workin on this one. give feed please and drop a link an i'll return tha favor. thanks

[sILLable]

well its got alot of grammatical errors..there arent really any bars that i would consider long enough..and this is the same ol mainstream shit you hear on the radio and see on tv 24/7..thats why i dont listen to the radio...gangsta rap is better on wax...than text..and even then it aint good....your have no complexity..rhyme scheme is elementary..no multis or any real vocab..all in all this piece could use major elevation...no hate just bein real.~1~

[sILLable]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ty-354282.html

oh yea..theres my link

[Vincent Maestro]

I hated this it was just a bunch of gangsta Bravado....if you want to drop hooks and shit like that drop an audio........just drop a good rhyme next time...bitch...do that or stay the fuck out the OM section sucker.....
all you fucking newbies need to start leaving Feeds...and stop dropping bullshit POsts!!!!