The Night
(Blood Ink Collab)
Whispers fall from sight... we call this night
a time when most humans spread the blight.
talking of heists... and who currently has the rarest spice
they trade cocaine like bread,... that's life...
so take flight...
or soon be made a drug pettle'n poltergeist
fallen beneath the moons descending knife
Okay, cool imagery, syntax was cool, flow was average enough.
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Ascending heights, to dark for the windows sight
So...when the tints bent right it defuses your eye might,
In delusion your mind fights, its own damn mistakes
Shadows appear in front of you...
Weren't there in the first place?
I liked the change in the rhyming scheme, nice imagery, nice & descriptive too.
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The earth breaks me and takes me into the darkest hour
Starts to devour, but these parts of my heart are sour
Be smart with power for responsibility mixes the toxins
And take fantasy to the places that you wish to walk in
Bliss is not sin, but sin is all bliss - notice a reversed side
Coming back to a center without taking that first stride
Best verse so far, nice internals, & the syllables matched for the most part, imagery was nice once again.
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hallucinations, flush your patience till your seen as one of the patients
stationed with rage and frustration, for your delirium relations
conscience is vacant, the night's facing the depths of perception
taking steps to deception, till your swept, and kept in a session
no ands, buts, or questions, your fed the meds from the physician
a glimpse of fiction twists your vision, to a state of contradiction
Nice again, flow & multies were cool. Vocab was nice, seemed a tad forced at times though. Imagery was nice.
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delighted by the night lit sky invited by the demons
who are some how excited by suffice of the screaming
enticed by the precise twist of evenings when it's
evil seeking. Trying not to let the evil seep in.
Unconscious breathing. Eyes closed and speechless.
In the hour of your brethren preparing bereavement.
Haha, dope, rhyme scheme was dope, syntax nice, emotion was there too. Technically speaking, a nice verse.
Overall a nice collab, hit up my piece.
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