appreciated...I will be RTF later 2 day.
appreciated...I will be RTF later 2 day.
Tops.
First and Second stanzas' were my favorites. The ending was alright but the first two were just great. I don't know if this was Hall of Fame worthy or not but deffintly a nice read. Nice emotion, original, creative. Keep writing.
wow, there was definitly alot of emotion in this piece, the metaphors about the heart were really in depth not just something that came off the top. the symbolic lines in this piece were really nice. it wasn't just about how it is copeing with a broken heart, it was the broken heart. the flow was iight too, the multis were well thought out and the flow had me going. good piece, i'll keep an eye out for your next one.
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Damn, this peice was fucking amazing. I think you've finally come out of your shell, lol. This was nice and contained everything a reader would want to read to stay entertained. The imagery on this peice was like waring 3d glasses, lol. Everything seemed so real, and you can just feel wat your talking about. The Emotion was there, and was added a nice touch with the pictures at the end of it. Rhyme scheme was great and choice of words was real good. Overal, Excellent piece. HoF worthy IMO.
damn u really got better this shit was outragious the pic was a good pic for ur style and ur multis internal was dope....ur rhymeskeme was also very cleaver and the mechanics and the flow was impecible this was really a great peice i say in a few peices ull be getting into the hof...this is almost there this really has to be the best peice that ive seen come from you,
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that shit was crazy i really loved this peice...Now that the main goal is untangled.
The Stars and Stripes are seen upon your banner that’s spangled
My heart lies mangled. Signs unnoticed
even when the smoke clear's I'm still smoking.
I handle the anger from different angles.
Maintained not to be the same dude.
Well that’s at least what I’ve claimed to.
Every since I named you. Gave you the title
And that’s when you changed you. And took
Societies frame too. For the worse
Now noticing that the truth was first. It hurts.
The pain is simple. From the eyes to the heart.
Then the brain and temple. All the way down to
The veins and gristle.
hit up the om
Last edited by GrimmyReaps; August 13th, 2007 at 11:50 AM
appreciated..and i will hit it 2day..
the imagery of this was cool, i liked the concept and i can feel the emotion thru-out... i especially liked these lines..
Now that the main goal is untangled.
The Stars and Stripes are seen upon your banner that’s spangled
My heart lies mangled. Signs unnoticed
even when the smoke clear's I'm still smoking.
I handle the anger from different angles.
Maintained not to be the same dude.
Well that’s at least what I’ve claimed to.
Every since I named you. Gave you the title
And that’s when you changed you. And took
Societies frame too. For the worse
Now noticing that the truth was first. It hurts.
The pain is simple. From the eyes to the heart.
Then the brain and temple. All the way down to
The veins and gristle.
very dope rhyme-scheme there, just a nice part i was feeling packed full of deep emotion.
anyways, keep this up, i liked i, dope.
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