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10 lines
blind drop
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lol kk
don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footsteps on the moon
I was standin upside down while i was doin this drop.
And i read the rankings for the league.. no surprise you were on top.
You're gay.<-- that's straight forward honesty if ya didnt catch that.
So since this battle's straight forward.. you need to take a step back.
Ya gettin slaughtered, murdered n' killed with this peril.
Light at the end of the tunnell?..
.. nah, that's just the reflection of your grill thru my barrell.
Im droppin a keystyle for your ugly ass, usin lines i chose not to waste.
And blind aint how we're droppin.. it's what i wish i was when i saw ur face.
Way2Poetique: u almost done yo verse?
HENSizaking: ya 1 more line
Way2Poetique: *waits for u to finish*
^^That reminds me of somethin. honestly, wait.
Oh.. i know..
... that's what ya mother did while i was jackin off in her face.
don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footsteps on the moon
Vet?
No one likes anything from you seems like your shits rough
So Dont even bother writing, cuz your writings bother us enough
Everyone kows this fag aint dope, all stories are myths
And yea i'd knock his ass senseless but he had no money to begin with
This kid parades through rb like he's dope, what a fuckin sharade
So watch me storm through your verse, so i can reign on your parade
I Will admit J.Hens WAS good but as of now he sucks
tired of beatin em, so i let em rest assure, since he's so washed up
We All know this kids a bitch quick to get a weapon, kilings a sin
n this bitch's always pointing a gun since its his only shot @ a win
ROFSDFGSMKDfjfxbfgjsd @ both of ya'llz flippin 2 of my lines..
from the battle i JUST had..
'n then usin 'em against EACH OTHER! roflz. roflz. roflz.
you dumb AZZ FAWKZ!
I was standin upside down while i was doin this drop.
And i read the rankings for the league.. no surprise you were on top
Ya gettin slaughtered, murdered n' killed with this peril.
Light at the end of the tunnell?..
.. nah, that's just the reflection of your grill thru my barrell.
vs.
Everyone kows this fag aint dope, all stories are myths
And yea i'd knock his ass senseless but he had no money to begin with
We All know this kids a bitch quick to get a weapon, kilings a sin
n this bitch's always pointing a gun since its his only shot @ a win
meh, weak from both sides. J hens didn't really try that hard, and this other kid came kind've played. senseless wordplay is played along with ashore and rain - reign wordplay. it's just not effective if its been used so much. sorry.
v. J hens, more original.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=304955
Not the best battle hear....Both had a decent drops with punches and wordplay and shit but i thought enthrawl hit harder then his opponent....other dude no hate your drop was aiight to but i didnt feel you came hard enough....elevate abit homie.
Vote//Enthrawl no hate other dude.
SMOKEY
was standin upside down while i was doin this drop.
And i read the rankings for the league.. no surprise you were on top.
ha
You're gay.<-- that's straight forward honesty if ya didnt catch that.
So since this battle's straight forward.. you need to take a step back.
ha
Ya gettin slaughtered, murdered n' killed with this peril.
Light at the end of the tunnell?..
.. nah, that's just the reflection of your grill thru my barrell.
meh
Im droppin a keystyle for your ugly ass, usin lines i chose not to waste.
And blind aint how we're droppin.. it's what i wish i was when i saw ur face.
ha
Way2Poetique: u almost done yo verse?
HENSizaking: ya 1 more line
Way2Poetique: *waits for u to finish*
^^That reminds me of somethin. honestly, wait.
Oh.. i know..
... that's what ya mother did while i was jackin off in her face.
meh k
vs.
No one likes anything from you seems like your shits rough
So Dont even bother writing, cuz your writings bother us enough
no
Everyone kows this fag aint dope, all stories are myths
And yea i'd knock his ass senseless but he had no money to begin with
nah
This kid parades through rb like he's dope, what a fuckin sharade
So watch me storm through your verse, so i can reign on your parade
no
I Will admit J.Hens WAS good but as of now he sucks
tired of beatin em, so i let em rest assure, since he's so washed up
nah
We All know this kids a bitch quick to get a weapon, kilings a sin
n this bitch's always pointing a gun since its his only shot @ a win
no
V/J.Hans easy
Heaven's Guardians Of True Hip-Hop
i didnt flip that line, i just now searched to see what you were talking about. 'light at the end of the tunnell' is a damn cliche lol, not some original concept pimpster.Originally Posted by it's untold
ROFSDFGSMKDfjfxbfgjsd @ both of ya'llz flippin 2 of my lines..
from the battle i JUST had..
'n then usin 'em against EACH OTHER! roflz. roflz. roflz.
don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footsteps on the moon
Hens had the only witty line in this battle, which was the opener. the only thing is - this is a battle forum, not a league... lol... hope you didn't recycle, hens. either way, decent verse. obvious half ass, but still some ok material. enthral - the "bother writing / bother us enough" concept was ok, but not that witty. the reason is because it's a simple technique and that was only an "avg" example of the already overdone technique... other examples:
How you gonna raise the bar? you cant even raise the voters eyebrow
- someone from 03, i think 13th disciple
there's also an example in legends which goes something like "how you gonna raise the bar when you can't even raise ya kids" . the examples go on and on.
the problem a lot of FL kids have is that they use OLD TECHNIQUES without using advanced forms of those techniques. Its one thing to use wordplay, and its another thing to use overly simple wordplay, know what I mean? the FL heads are the ones using the bare-minimum type wordplay though. so I'll say it again and again: read a lot of battles, and you will get better. Enthrawl, if you're wondering why I'm not being critical of Hens' verse, its because Hens already knows these tips. I figure it will help you out more than it will help him out, thats all. Anyway, not a bad verse. you are at least USING different techniques of punches. now you have to work on being more advanced with them. also note the technique hens uses, where he makes his setup part of the punch... like he does in his opener. He's one of the few I've seen using that technique, and like any other technique, its only good if you make proper use of it. just thought i should note that tho
v - hens
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