I liked this bro.Some very good imagery here and brilliant vocab.Really makes your piece a lot more impressive and you also do not use to much vocab as that can ruin a piece.Very nice creativity too but you could have gone differant places but what you did was just fine.Some of your lines seem a bit too short,maybe you should make then the slighest bit longer.Nice emotion partrayed by you also and I will be looking out for more of your pieces.
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"Children and lunatics cut the Gordian knot which the poet spends his life patiently trying to untie."
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ya i use those lines cuz of poetry
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nice peice...i felt the emotion and imagery
rhyme scheme was nicely done.good wordplay
i thought this had a nice poetic feel to this
overall this was very nice peice i liked it.
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