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    Blind is state of Mind. Braille's Avatar
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    When have i ever felt a life...or alive?
    Only when I cry.
    Because the sensation of tears running down your face
    remind you of how it's possible to dwell on one thing at a time.
    One thing so real
    that it connects you with the one time a Life was breathed into your lungs.
    My Mind is constantly wandering
    jumping on trains and planes, to only see plains of names and faces,
    i play name games in places, guesssing the names to every face is....
    an unconsious effort to make a connection to something you know of
    to someone you know nothing about.
    The eyes are the windows to souls of man.
    When was the last time you looked through a window, and only saw one thing?
    I see rainbows
    yellow takes me to orange
    orange takes me to red
    red takes me to purple
    and purple takes me to blue.
    Blueish windows with shades of grey
    make me wonder if everything isn't exact....
    between the lines of reality, is still reality.
    what's not seen doesn't have to be heard.
    What's not heard can be felt.
    The stroke of a paint brush from a blind man, isn't corrupted.
    It is pure.
    It is what the heart feels as perfect
    without being disturbed by false ideals of perfection.
    The stroke of a finger, the souls paintbrush
    Caresses a canvas protected by flesh, and the lines of a palm.
    Souls connect as every picture painted has one deliberate message.
    A message to be dwelled on,
    with meaning of
    nothing more
    or nothing less
    than what it is.
    Just like the tears of a child,
    so happy to feel the worlds energy for the first time, everything is as simple as it is meant to be.
    Complexities are nothing but....
    beauty,
    balance, and
    nature taken out of context.
    I control my tears by rationalizing beauty i havn't been able to comprhend since the day I was born.
    Beauty someone only comprehends when something is so powerful,
    it forces them to cry.
    Beauty that can only be understood when the electricity of a simple touch lights the room even when your eyes are closed.
    And even the light being vastly greater than that of the sun,
    it's the touch that forces the tear for understanding beauty in knowing nothing but the exact moment.
    The light is a truism, known, but not thought of.
    A by product of the touch that inspires tears.
    I used to want to die the death of a martyr.
    I think now,
    i would rather die crying.
    H.ence
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    Wow. This poem is like the insight of your thoughts and your world. Or so I felt it was presented that way. There is alot of things here that I can relate to, and the opening kept me hooked to the rest. Very well presented.

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    thankyou very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it
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    Well i hated the structure, but i'm not going to be shallow in the thinking that poetry is fuck all to do with structure.

    I really enjoyed this peice man... at the start i found it hard to get into, but then about 5-6 lines down i really started to enjoy it and what was good about it was the imagery was on point, which is obviously importand concidering it's poetry, i really was additcitvly reading this peice, i almost felt compeled to go tot he next line to go deeper into your work, that is a rare quality i see in a peice, so i definately commend you on the point.

    Th emotion was in the right place aswell, which once agin was important to a poem such as this... i didn't like the topic to start of with, but then after i read the peice i realised that it wasn't the usuaal thing i'd see being written on this topic, which once again was a very good part of my enjoyment to the read...

    Your vocabulary was very desciptive and complex, yet even though it was complex you didn't go over the top with the vocab, which to me ruins a peice, it makes the peice sound forced and just randomm placed big words to make the writter sound interlectual, when actually it just makes them look like an idiot as most of the words are placed in the wrong context... but as i said you really had that well placed and on point.

    You obviously have a talent for poetry, and i would like to see alot more from you in this feild of writting and maybe do a colab with you if you wanted, if so jsut pm me...

    Ps id apreciate if you'd feed on one of my poems in this forum such as 'crying in the chapel' or my colab with laureate.

    Thank you. and thank you for the read.
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