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  1. #1
    terep
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    Angry promises

    i just got a phone call 30 mins ago from ma dad letting me down once again so i decided to write a piece on him.

    dont make promises that you know you cant keep,
    coz i know for a fact you'll forget in a week,
    make your excuses then another one to leave,
    how do you expect anybody to believe,
    what you are saying is true, when you cant deliever,
    i remember when you had promised me dinner,
    the day before you said you had brought me a bimmer,
    lies have got thicker, trust has now got thinner,
    i have learnt now not to take your words as gospel,
    you can live with me cos you live in that hostel,
    yeah like fuck, my 2 fingers are up ya nostrils,
    leave you flat on your back, cos you know you've just lost all,
    trust that i had ever given you, yeah fuck you,
    who needs a dad around when there lining up in ques,
    to adopt me, yeah thats right ill find someone new,
    some one who loves me, whos promises come true.

  2. #2
    Strange_Dayz
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    good emotion but work on vocab

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    that was a good piece i liked that cuz i could relate to somethin like that but anyway it was pretty good...use more creative words and make it longer...good job

  4. #4
    terep
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    yeh im goin to do a more in depth piece tonight that was just the rough guide. nuff love

  5. #5
    terep
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    n e more feed from n e body? huh?

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