For eternity

[Devils_Diamond]

Devils D be the one ~Forever exsisting~/
Others biological clock i ~severe the ticking~/
Been on ~earth~ since the ~sworn pharoh~/
since my ~birth~ i was takin' ~bone marrow~/
sunsets singing sweetly but silently/
gun bets ringing discretly and violently/
Witnessed my ~foes passaway~/
Thoughts ~arose~ was i a ~castaway~/
~Wars came~ vicously to ~deepen the quake~/
~Whores slain~ no more ~seamen to take~/
~present day~ comes with such ~anticapation~/
~peasants pray~ for a more righteous ~nation~/
flames ~unda my feet~ got you hearin my ~thunder & heat~/
as i ~break it down~ and like the bombs in iraq ~shake the ground~/
spittin the ~sickest shit~ like i got a disease and just cant ~get rid of it~/
fuck hittin 2 birds with ~one stone~ hitcha wit 2 lyrical slugs to ~one dome~/

there 16 lines



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=251465

uppin for feed

[warchild]

Look kid you need to add a few more bars to this piece you need 16 lines minimum or the mods will close this so edit this with a few more lines cause it will be a shame if this is closed. First off the flow obviously stood out the most to me there was a lot of multies so you get my props for that. Your vocab was good it helped you come up with some decent imagery but it was too short really to go too in depth so add a few more lines man or this will be closed.
Return the feed on my OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250913

[Devils_Diamond]

got that 16 up