Legend Rising

[C-Mac]

Listen;

U Don't Know How Many -Dumb Fucks I've Taken Down-,
I Keep The -Gun Tucked Wit Plenty Rounds-,
Leave -Anyone Bucked, Body Makin' Sounds-,
Have You And Ya -Son Struck Wit Many 'Round-.../
It's Like I Eat Flames For Breakfast, Cuz I Tend Ta -Spit Heat-,
My Lyrics Act As Bats Cuz Each Verse U -Get Beat-.../
My Styles Tip-top, I Murder Losers Wit -Hip Hop-,
If U Was A Blood I'd Stand In Ya House And -Crip Walk-,
My Game Shines More Than A Jacob -Wrist Watch-,
If U Wanna Act Like 50 Than U Could Really -Get Shot-.../
Why Am I Open Micin'? I Should Be -Declarin' My Title-,
And Hostin' The First Hip-Hop -American Idol-.../
I Started In The Gutter, Killin' -Retarded Muthafuckas-.../
Now I'm Steady Takin' Bets, On How Fast I Could -Rape A Vet-.../
My Level Rises Faster Than Stocks And -Gas Prices-,
Tha Kid Who -Raps Nicest-,
I Never Like Recyclers, So My Lyrical Blades -Slash Biters-.../
My Game Increases At A -Faster Pace-,
I Spit More Sick Vocab Than These Noobies -Masterbate-,
-Mac Is Great-,
I'm A Legend Rising, But Still All U -Bastards Hate-.../
Like Anerexics We See Ur Weak, Go Ahead Try Ta -Battle Me-,
U'll Need A Cavalry Ta Rattle Me, Winning's In My -Anatomy-,
U Bums R Like Remotes Cuz Ya'll Where I Put My -Batteries-.../
I Won't Stop Like Poverty, Or Go Down -Like Taxes-,
I Don't Rhyme Ta -Fight Asses-, Or -Invite Clashes-,
My Words Are Recited And Bited By Text And -Mic Masses-.../
I'm Never Scared Like Bone Crusher, Leave U And Ur -Boy Shanked-,
I'm Make Crews Look Good, Like -Lloyd Banks-.../

feedback

1up verse:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...46#post3349846
Twixsin verse:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...55#post3349855

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[C-Mac]

oh my bad..............

[C-Mac]

aight uppin' for feedback now..my bad about forgetting about the feedback rule...i read it but i guess forgot like 2 seconds later...my bad.............................aight i need some feedback.

[Black Hornet]

good flow,
you got sometight rhymes and that,

my fav line: originally posted by C-Mac
"Why Am I Open Micin'? I Should Be -Declarin' My Title-,
And Hostin' The First Hip-Hop -American Idol-.../"
thats some cool shit mang.

[TheCrunkKing]

blah, diddent feel it mane, i mean, people need to stop wit the gangsta thing, i mean bout reppin da red or blue in there songs, i mean i rep, just not in songs

[C-Mac]

aight.....uppin' for more feedback

[NaS]

This shit was wack, no offense, but all the attempts at punch-lines were half-assed and simply played out. example -

"It's Like I Eat Flames For Breakfast, Cuz I Tend Ta -Spit Heat-," ?, moving on. The whole shit didn't really flow to me, and rhyming with the same word is kind of... garbage too. and after re-reading.. another played line -

"My Level Rises Faster Than Stocks And -Gas Prices-,"

im out. stay up, keep tryin.

-one

[~ladie_streetz~]

your structure was okay the way it was written, you honestly dont need all of these -'s okay. your flow was okay some lines were shortened but you acme good in that area for creativity in your verse, i felt you could ahve added m,ore creativity to spice it up a lilttle bit more instead of having basics to it. the vocab was decent nothing to big though but thats cool, just get together with structure, and get togtehe with the flow it was off at times but overall you came decent. just still need to elevate

holla

[~ladie_streetz~]

This shit was wack, no offense, but all the attempts at punch-lines were half-assed and simply played out. example -

"It's Like I Eat Flames For Breakfast, Cuz I Tend Ta -Spit Heat-," ?, moving on. The whole shit didn't really flow to me, and rhyming with the same word is kind of... garbage too. and after re-reading.. another played line -

"My Level Rises Faster Than Stocks And -Gas Prices-,"

im out. stay up, keep tryin.

-one

dam didnt have to say it like it.... it was shitty a little bit thats not helping him with improving it next time Nas ha ha.