Thank you everyone....
I may start writing more
Thank you everyone....
I may start writing more
AI
Well...this is formatted for the rapbattles general audience. I'm kinda tired of reading pieces like this and its not because its not wrote well. It's merely because it is a perfect example of RB boundaries. So i guess i'd like to see you expand your writing skill and possibly focus on indirect subjects rather than stating the obvious. The ending should have been messed with a bit more...but your structure was good as well as your rhyme scheme. Dont take this as an insult...most writers are just the same...
Im in search of a revolution
softfocus
while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage
How's it feel to lack in comparison?............
up.
AI
lol, when I first saw the thread name,
I thought to myself, "Chrit got to drunk and ended up with whiskey dick"
but nope, you got to drunk and slept with the wrong chick... oo that rhymed...
lol anyways... kind of a funny piece, hope it didn't actually happen in real life, but it was funny as shit anyways.. Nice structure, was felling it for sure. everything else but topic and portrayal was just ....eh... so overall 8/10
^^do u honestly think that I want to be hearin, "Oh Daedal, I just wanted to inform you that YOU alone are the reason i keep rapping. Keep it up my man. Oh yea, my AIM is freehead69, if u ever want to catch me, or talk sometime!"Originally Posted by sabotage
seriously kid...quit makin an ass out of urself...
and im done postin in here....
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that was tight shit. U stayed ontopic, the flow was great. vocab was great, The beginning was kind of weak but you built it up well. Nice piece man.creativity was great. good job.
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"I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."
- Martin Luther King Jr.
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View this from last year^
i like it... i think some of the phrasing was a little careless... and that hampered it from being a great work...
I think the perfect perfected line... maybe the best example of chrit adapting to a topical style...
keep up the good work... and I hope you beat me man
Hence Forward
^^^
I dont do topical lol......
AI
pretty cool
A h e U n c D e f I o r B w a L r d E
i read the feedback, not the verse
and from what i got its pretty good
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^ Lmao
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bomb first bitches
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