Existentialism.

[Neruda II]

Existentialism

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Bloomquist
Emotion flows raw, in an unknown intense thought situation...
While my mind is high on vocab as flows show representation...
The scriptures i'm facin, collapse indolently without force...
Writing compresses dialect to reach an unknown source...
Existence collides with the facts that are supplied...
That opinions roll down mountains and reach steep climbs...

I'm sorry reader, I lied...

Emotion inteses and increases in size, when under severe thought pressure...
Cherish the moments you only get once, they are truly a poetic treasure...
As things get rough, these stories flow...better out of my mouth...
As I take in scences, create my themes..Aquire knowledge, and spit it back out...

[Thrust]

paroxysm, i was feeling your style from the start. pretty decent verse. a couple of lines caught my attention and stood out to me. the end of your verse was really catchy to me. not taking away from the rest of your verse, but that just capped it off nicely. decent basic flow to it. good job.

bloom, real nice follow up. your style too was just right for the piece. a quality verse i'd say. good display of talent all around. one thing i would have liked to see was..the 2nd part of the verse, i think you could have given it a different structure. when i read it i imagined it as in a shorter structure, and i'm pretty sure you'll know what i mean. still good because structure really doesn't matter. nice job bloom digity.

GOOD COLLABO, YO.

[Mesmerize]

very nice collab guys...ya know its good to see po back and active with the collabs. I liked the topic to this, i thought both of you took it very well. Sharp, i really like how you were thinkin when you wrote your part, some parts put things in a different perspective and kinda made me think a little. Flow was decent and imagery was pretty good. You both had nice emotion that stood out well in this. Bloom, you had some good vocab in yours that really enhanced the emotion of it. Flow was pretty good as well as creativity on both parts. I like how you ended it, it was different and surprised me actually. You guys done a great job in making this a whole. Nice drop guys, keep it up

peace,
Mez

[Bloom.Quist]

Thank you. Though my piece was bullshit

[Mesmerize]

it twasnt bullshit....

[Mc_Nabb]

bloom i really liked it too it deff wasemt bullshit i need to work on something like that......i been trying but im alot better at battling -_-