Bounce's quick High-ku

[Bounce]

Senryu
(Reflective of Human Nature)





Socialist Visions
Impacted Moral Fiber
Assault from the Left

Secular Treason
Betrays Spiritual Reason
Societies' Death

A-Bomb-A-Nation
Contamination that Spreads
Elitisms' Foul Breath

Like Ancient God Seth
Romantic Idealism
Kills Brothers' of Flesh

Arrogant Peoples'
Blinded Contempt for the West
An Idiots' Quest…



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[Jug Uh Knot]

This Was A Nice Peace. You Had Nice Vocab. This Was A Good Piece, I Didnt Even Think You Did Poetry. Nice Piece, I Know Its NOt That Much Of Feedback.. 8/10

[Varentao]

Aye, striking back at those who played such a big part in blinding them.

It was very sharp. Whcih i guess one would expect from such a syllable structure. I don't know who the 'Ancient God Seth' is. Egyptian? Greek? Er...but doesn't mean one doesn't get what you're saying with it. Though if you could explain who it is to me, maybe it'll enable me to grasp it further.

A strong piece. It holds well against the left and the relative illogic it sometimes (okay, most of the time) comes with it.

Okay, so the blinding line was probably meant to be more about 'western' people disliking their own goverment and way of life. Rather than people from 'the east'. Because i feel if it was the latter, arrogance would not be the 'right' or 'balanced' word to use. It doesn't do them 'justice' as such. Their situation..their mentalities in general.

Very nice read, bounce.

..resp..

[Bounce]

Fatal Mirage-

Thanks for the feedback, it is appreciated. I assume you thought I was exclusively rap, text/audio. Actually my forte is poety, classical writting, shorty stories and things of that nature. Rap is just another avenue for me to express myself to quote the hit from NWA, back in the day's. I was kind of pressupred into by my friends band one night, and who would have known what was to follow. I have been rapping in a band ever since... I'm glad you enjoyed the read, as I was High as the ozone layer while I wrote the thing.


Varentao-

As always my friend you have a keen eye for detail. I am delighted that you nailed the Arrogance line flat on the head. How can a third world nation hold such an elite position on such an issue as the West? Simply stated that would be stretching words to far my firend. As you suspect and quite logically correct, the contempt is found right here amongst our own citezenry. I was pointing out a well known, yet rather un popular idea, to those compelled by such elite idealism. As we have discussed before, it is the ideas and compassion of the left, in opposition to the hard logic of the right. I do not consume myself with much of either, except where the practicle out wieghts the romantics assocaited such extreme idealism.

Oh and the line about the Ancient Egyptian God Seth-
Seth was the son Geb and Nut,the brother of Osirus. Osiruis was the God in charge of watching over man. Osiris was King and Isis his Queen, his brother Seth grew jelous and murdered Osiris. That is how he became King of the underworld (Osiris) as we know him today. The killing was later revenged by the son of Osiris, Horus. Horus reclaimed his father's throne as the king of man, he was the protector of pharoah. Hence the pharoah was dawned... The living Horus. Seth is the god of evil and confusion, such as the trickery of the left in extreme circumstance. I thouhgt it was a good analogy to make, due to the mechanics behind the High-Ku. I hope this sheds a little more light on my message...

If anyone needs me to explain any other area, please let me know, or go into greater detail. Egyptian mythology can be duscussed as well, I was always influenced by the political parallel's contained in them.

Thanks for taking the time...
~Bounce~

[.:LadySage:.]

This was nice. I read it once through, not thoroughly and didn't really get it. I started reading the interpertations below it, and I started thinking. I read it about twice after that.. and I like it. It has a sort of abstract style, made me think a whole lot ( or it could be that i'm tired) but I enjoyed the read. Keep writing.

[Bounce]

Thanks for the feedback lady sage. I am glad it made you think, as that was my intent. The majority of my drops, require deeper concentration, what one did not pick up on in the first read, should stand out in later reads. Varentao and a handfull of others have been quite sharp at recognizing the encrpted approach I take in my drops. Props out to all of you, it's because of this RB has been a wonderful place to post...

Thanks for your time...
~Bounce~

[Tourniquet]

Wonderful Senryu Bounce. Very thought provocative in its own encrypted way, as per your usual style. The decay of our society is a sad thing indeed, especially when such hatred is spawned from jealousy.

Also, did you realise Isis was actually sister of Seth and Osiris. After the murder of Osiris Seth sent his dismembered body parts to far parts of Egypt. Isis and Nephthys (their sister, and also Seths wife) roamed the land in search of the pieces. Once reassembling the body of Osiris, Isis used her magic to resurrect him long enough for them to copulate and her conceive a son, Horus.

[Bounce]

Wonderful Senryu Bounce. Very thought provocative in its own encrypted way, as per your usual style. The decay of our society is a sad thing indeed, especially when such hatred is spawned from jealousy.

Also, did you realise Isis was actually sister of Seth and Osiris. After the murder of Osiris Seth sent his dismembered body parts to far parts of Egypt. Isis and Nephthys (their sister, and also Seths wife) roamed the land in search of the pieces. Once reassembling the body of Osiris, Isis used her magic to resurrect him long enough for them to copulate and her conceive a son, Horus.

Thanks for you feedback, I am glad you guy's enjoyed the read. Yeah I try toget thoughts provoked in the non traditional sense. Makes the message seem that much more meaningful, if a person has to really dig out the content. I could have posted each seperate high-ku, but I decided that they all fit so well together, I might as well use them as a whole.

Yes I am quite the ancient history buff, and full aware of the relation the four children of geb and nut had. I did not want to get too involved in that discussion, becuase you guy's alll know I have a tendenciy to just carry on and on... One day we should have a discussn on this topic, it is one I would love to have with all of you. Then again maybe I should dig up some of my old pieces pertaining to the ancient stories... I spent so many nights researching the subjuect, it's all so interesting to me. I prefer the Atem, point of creation, rahter than the others.

[Tourniquet]

Count me in.. Im 4th year into a triple major - Ancient History/Archeaology/Religious History. My main strain of Ancient History is Egyptology, my favourite period also being the Middle Kingdom, namely that of the heretic King Akhenaton. Anytime Bounce

[Spoken]

bounce another thought provoking piece from you. your piece came across strong, and full. you got your thoughts/ideas across nicely and put them in good light. kept it interesting, and didnt drag the topic out. had good content, and thank you for explaining who god seth was, i learned something new today from you lol. nice piece all and all.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

[Bounce]

UP'd for nostalgia..(sp? It was happy hour just ten minutes ago)

[Laureate]

This was nice.....I was impressed that you ended up rhymin the last word of each Haiku...that was difficult when I tried it. This was a nice piece Bounce, you got your message accross....I took my own meaning out of this as I am not knowledgeable about the Ancient events you were talking about.... well done

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