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    ...Strands of Destiny...




    As I tuck my heart into rest
    I feel anxiety pound in my chest…

    A creation of two, now held together by one
    It’s a tangled web indeed, reproduction has spun…

    My most guarded treasure,
    Brought forth by a night of heated pleasure…

    Lost in ecstasy
    No, I did not see
    Just how important she’d be…

    A true representation
    Of our reproductive elation

    Dare we?
    Test the strands of…
    Destiny

    A momentous task
    So easily rendered, with lips to flask…
    Do you need ask?

    A physical merge
    Acting upon an instinctual urge…
    Victims of chemistry
    Or sexual splurge?

    Two lives on separate paths converge
    Exchange pleasantries,
    Digits and seductive words…

    Where verbal conversation
    Leads to physical communication
    In other words…
    A genetic docking station…

    Where transfer of information
    Results in fertilization
    Of the host nation,
    Without hesitation…

    Sure as two became one
    A new life has dawned…

    The morning after, I stretch then yawn
    Look around… She’s already gone…

    Is this dramatic realization
    Or a misrepresentation?

    Again I ask thee…

    Dare we?
    Test the strands of…
    Destiny

    By: Bounce-Dawg-E-dawg


    *Just a quick free write, was thinking about my little one (her name is Destinie)*
    Last edited by Bounce; March 31st, 2004 at 09:42 PM

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    third party uppin...

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    It was nice...could of spent more time and made it dope!...the structure works at times, doesnt at others...some nice feeling and emotions put in...good word choices...
    rhymes were pretty good....
    7.5/ 10

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=123432
    thanx

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    Aight bounce...this was pretty well done but as Avenge said you could have made it a bit better by spending more time on it...but it was a quick key so it was well done considering that. Emotion was strong in this...you portrayed you love for your daughter very well...flow was on and off...kinda jerky...imagry wasn't there..but wasn't needed in a piece like this...overall nicely done

    Please peep http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=123189
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