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Thread: Like A Phoenix Out Of The Ashes (Death) Pt. II

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    Like A Phoenix Out Of The Ashes (Death) Pt. II

    Like A Phoenix Out Of The Ashes...(Death) Pt. II
    Written By: ELEETE




    The Beginning To An End...

    Once an unknown, now a legend on the edge of death
    He curls himself up, alone in his glassed nest
    Nothing left...In an instant with his last breath
    He recaps his life from his birth to his last steps
    One filled with accomplishments an great mistakes
    In his final resting place no longer can he endure or take
    The pain he’s withstood the countless years of fight
    No longer will he flee his nest an pursue flight
    The legendary bird made up of flames which gives life
    Has began to shed its fiery body in a blaze light
    One of the few chosen ELEETE, now forced to restart anew
    Forever forgettin all memories of a life it once knew
    A tear drops an rolls down the side of its face
    Its place in this world will be forgotten leaving no trace
    A new unknown will soon rise for this to be replaced
    We embrace what’s left behind...a legend to be retraced
    A long an tiresome journey, a destiny fulfilled once again
    It explodes into flames, bringin its life to an end

    The End To A New Beginning...


    Please read the Pt. I (Reborn) if you havent already! Thanks!
    "ELEMENCE" AKA "ELEETE"

    -=:The Lighter Side Of Darkness:=-


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    i thought this had a slightly better scheme and flow than the first one, it brought it to an end nicely with an abrupt ending, which i like, its more definate if you know what i mean... you told the thing well, and stuck to a decent way of writing.... your definately improving..... keep at it...
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    ^^Thanks!! Uppin^^

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    very nice piece again...dope imagery and vocab...as well as flow

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    Thanks Yo, Uppin^^

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    daz ill cuzz... but try and make it a bit long and try to give it more of a story line rather den rhyme ..... its all gd tho... ill wordplay and sik structure....

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    This was nice...I really enjoyed your story line..your imagery was pretty good...I can see that you are focusing more on your writing,other than your rhymes or flows..which is alwaya a plus...very good two parts so far...peace...

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    ^^I guess what people havent gotten so far is that this is the prequel.....Read the last bar on Pt II and read the first on Pt I....It'll make a lot more sense hehe but thanks everyone!^^
    "ELEMENCE" AKA "ELEETE"

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