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    Ill-Meaning

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    This is a word heard with many meanings
    Can bring strange emotions and estranged feelings
    It can be physical or cause mental un-healing
    Cos this word it has many meanings

    The first form is when it fucks with ya brain
    Turning normal cells to abnormal turning ppl insane
    Like Schizophrenic’s shoot themselves then they’re the medics
    Or murder hooker’s and blame it on someone named Derek
    However, how much power its got,….
    Driving and drilling the brain, the thoughts they don’t stop
    Cos That’s the danger it’s masked with the average
    It Could be you or me secretly wielding the savage
    Lying dormant like the plague waiting, ready to ravage…

    This is a word heard with many meanings
    Can bring strange emotions and estranged feelings
    It can be physical or cause mental un-healing
    Cos this word it has many meanings

    Perhaps the most potent is the psychotic
    It’s like sticking ya fingers into a socket
    These go out and observe her, follow then murder
    Premeditated n un-medicated and take it one step further
    Bury the evidence with irrelevance and wash of the blood
    Once there clean the crimes washed away with the suds
    They seem to crave it, this time doesn’t grow in their mind
    Ya Born with it, its just a flaw in mankind
    You’ll find them worldwide they haven’t got a certain look
    So Watch ya back.. Cos there easily mistook….

    This word has been heard with many meanings
    It has brought strange emotions and estranged feelings
    But can be admired or cause virtual-healing
    With its one and only GOOD?? meaning

    ‘Some ill shit’ means ya writing good with respect
    Getting feedback, due for writing with feeling on spec
    Flowing talent on tap, reaching more than the members
    Reaching the guests,.. “I might join in December”
    So if ILL can mean good and translate to trauma or talent
    Somewhere in the middle there’s a pivotal balance
    A normal like me or like you.. Fucking Dehjahvous!
    If I was you id watch my enemy my friends-
    -my family and my crew, Cos the next victim could be YOU!!……
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    Wst feelint the concept, ..but u use a nice flow, ..and some nice vocab ..sometimes i got bored tho, for the rest this was ok .. =)

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    Wasnt really feelin it but it wus aiight,vocab wus aiight,flow was nice,overall it wus a 6/10.....but keep it up n express ur mind more!!.........0n3

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    thanx for the honest feed..appreciated.....it was, a bit of a poor topic.......any more ppl?
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    i didnt really mind the topic
    you had some nice wordplay, immagery, and vocab

    but you do need to elevate a lil bit, at times in the piece i got lost.

    but you do have a lotta potential.

    aiight

    peace

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    thnx.......can i get some more feeback thrown over here.......pZ
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    This was alright here i thought....structure was alright in this...your wordplay was pretty nice in this, liked that.....vocab was good like usual...flow was ok, stayed on through out this as i read it....but overall this was alright...keep at it.

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