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    He's amazing

    He is amazing for his intelligence
    He shows how wise he is
    He is amazing for shiney in his eyes
    when he talked about things he loved
    He is amazing for his ability to make other people smile,
    even when he is sad
    He is amazing for his look
    His style drive the girl crazy
    He's amazing for personality
    He has a heavy heart
    Last edited by Lady Poet; February 27th, 2022 at 05:56 PM

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    Re: He's amazing

    Beautiful Vixen, thanks for dropping.
    You've got some beautiful descriptions here with this guy.
    Detailing so many wonderful attributes; his intelligence and his wisdom and his
    ability to make others smile and many more. All this adds to the atmosphere you create,
    helping it build a theme -an ode to him.
    I would probably tell you to look at line three: 'He is amazing for shiney in his eyes'
    Maybe you wanted to talk about his shiny eyes? Not so much shiny in his eyes.
    Also the line where you say 'His style is drive girl crazy' would have sounded better
    had you written it the way we speak naturally 'His style drives girls crazy'.
    But I like that you've got this dudes list of hotness listed and ticked off just the way you like.

    Good stuff Vixen
    Keep that pen moving


    Thank you

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    Re: He's amazing

    Thanks for the feedback ��

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