Originally Posted by
Emily
Man, I have so many things to say about this. I've listened to it a few times now and want to give some thoughts and just never found the right time.
Thing is sound cloud isn't letting me pause the song as I go idk why.
Ok, on to this.
I think you did a great job conveying obvious spaced out atmosphere and theme through the piece and that allows the listener to connect to the airiness of it and travel for a while, its a nice flight. The elongated, stretched, zoned out words add to it; that vocal drag was good - intonation falls right, it works well. I like the pace. I'm not an expert in audio, but I know what I like and don't like. Just saying my opinion which means jack lol
Not big on the chorus, not because of the wording, loved NASA, and spaced out,
all the lyrics, just the delivery fell flat imo, idk why, could be me, is it the cord? Idk.
I don't want middle of the road when everything else works so well.
The rest is exceptional. The drag on the words is sensational and adds to the spaced out vibe.
You got a good partner; you mesh with the picture and story you wanna tell - that's evident.
I hear no other obvious dents or breaths or anything that stand out to annoy me.
Loved the intro, sounded a bit like breathing, it went longer than I thought, added bonus when a surprise pays off. Also I like that beginning bit That shit is crazy (that's what I heard it as) was a nice addition and unexpected.
Lyrics wise, id have to pick it apart to go down the rabbit hole but as it stands,
the lyrics/poetry backed up the track and the delivery proved it. Top notch.
@Jmin, Nice job producing this. Smooth talented creativity; evident. The quirks in the music were great. I like it when risks pay off. I believe its a testament to being true to yourself and not falling into the trap of creating for an audience. It sounds authentic and that's where 'we the people' connect. Vulnerability pays off. Choosing a different route pays off sometimes...
Einstein: "I never came upon any of my discoveries through the process of rational thinking."
This song maybe be influenced by past decades of inspiration but there's a freshness to it which is alive.
Love that first verse. Great wording, brilliant.'Lately I've been dealing with stress' ... like,
who the fuck hasn't right? And that 'YES' was gorgeous. The verse I'm listening to sounds uniform and streamline.
I'm impressed by the lyrics. Not showy but to the point: it hits the mark because I relate.
Now on to the rap, Niiiiiiiice.
I'll tell you off the bat what I like here; The edge. You've got a nice edge happening in this.
The way you interrupted with 'Man' and then started spitting, sounded gutsy, energetic, spirited, believable delivery - Gold. That's passion. Also, I admire the speed you're spitting at and the rhymes. Back to backing them, adding layers that up the performance. And not hollow fillers but relatable words. Nice emphasis on certain words, intonation - bingo.
You've set the mood beautifully by following through.
I think this is really good quality art and entertaining to listen to.
Top job fellas,
Thank you