Punching Bag

[Johnny 6-feet]

Punching Bag

Spark the lesson, igniting thoughts for the sparring session
Start the testing, impacts from the darts and weapons
Punching bags swing on rusted hinges, bearing silent witness
Of sweat dropped from lust and binges, as he tries to fix this
'Past his prime' they condemned him, now he barely gets a mention
From a generation of henchmen with a micro-sec attention
He laid foundations, dropped giants and picked up a scar or two
Stomped the pavements, forged alliances, fought with the hardest dudes
All this without auto-tune, the dust of ages falls in droves
As he prepares to return to the place he called his home
He's all alone, but standing strong, picking out the armory
To seize the throne and atone, even cut an artery
If that's the penance, per chance, to save his legacy

"The cultures fallen into shit!"

"Damn! Now you're telling me..."

The bag breaks, he cracks his vertebrae and heads to the exit
Bloodthirsty but refreshed, poised to answer a deathwish


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[Oxymoron]

I like this. Someone zoning out while working out and then at the end breaking the bag. I like the start imagry is repeated and continued at the end while cool imagry played out in the middle like a day dream of sorts. I thought the rhyming was very nice too.
plus i also like the angry at what the culture has turned out to be like tone. the quote solidifys that. but overall i cant find anything i didnt enjoy. was a pretty smooth read with very nice imagry.

[Ntalek.]

welcome back johnny...you killed this one..short and sweet..the flow was evident..if this wasn't a comeback/welcome home type of piece then..shit idk what is...you did ya thang on this one bro..not to much to critique..good read though..

[Nicasso]

This was nice man def came with every element that a great writer needs. I'm just happy to see you back around mu dude you always bring it with every drop. Flow was fucking solid it I hope you keep dropping next time I would like to see that old stroy telling Johnny , I have no complaints about this tho for what it is, you killed it. Please return the favor and hit this piece right here up for me.

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