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    Apologize

    Apologize


    (start at violin)

    The hardest of hearts, the hand that’s been showing
    Now I don’t claim to be knowing
    LOVE, the same love we both seek of
    Turning each other out game after game
    Both of us should be hanging our heads in shame
    When hurt, we shut down, not realizing when real come back round
    We hurt real, then real then hurt too
    The reverse touche come back around on you
    Real gonna scratch her nails down his back praying that you feel it
    While hurt gonna go in and go in, he praying his heart you just steal it

    But it’s too late…

    But in the end, no one wins
    We both left with feeling of sins
    Then comes the debate
    The hate
    The sat-ism
    Cause I’m afraid to go through that pain again too
    ICE cold, I become, the same thing that I was always so jealous of you
    Then you find it was all just an act
    How you sit back and not react
    And so it go… until real recognize real again
    Only real can’t steal what real just cannot feel
    So she turns and retreats regretfully
    So you try to rearrange the damage that’s been done
    And you find that special one
    Only he? He’s done
    What’s there left to do but run

    Cause I’m afraid… And it’s too late

    Now I make love with cold stares while rolling my eyes whispering sweet nothings
    Love don’t live here no more, anymore, ever again but at least my heart no longer stings
    Realizing I can’t get real and true without bringing someone else that hurt too
    So cold as ICE I lay back, open my legs, as I take off my shirt
    I stare at the ceiling and look to God as he slowly insert
    Trying hard not to cry, knowing I probably just lost my last allibi
    So I pretend
    Cause real still recognize real - but real just ain’t no longer a friend
    And I pray and I pray and I pray for it all just to end
    And I don’t expect you to comprehend
    And I don’t expect you to mend me
    And I don’t expect you to really see
    And I don’t expect love to ever be… again

    And it’s just way too late to apologize… PIMPS

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    Re: Apologize

    @ILLunatic meet Nicole AND Aubrey... ironic

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    Re: Apologize

    The flow in this was what caught my eye really...

    Your structure was high, your flow was high, your meaning in this poem was high and you used a run-on once the wrong way which ruined the flow in my opinion.

    Good.
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    Re: Apologize

    Ever go back and just read your shit? I do all the time...
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    Re: Apologize

    Rap battles and all intensity is measured for the goals. Battle of the man and professional essays writers is ensured for their ages. This output is ensured for the depth of the struggle for the candidates.

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    Re: Apologize

    I know you guys hate when I re-up shit but I let him see all that I write...

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    I didn't write that me Nicole and Aubrey shit... I don't even know what that means...
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    Re: Apologize

    Can I up this cause like I may not be so mad about it anymore to be honest but I don’t know for real yet either
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    Re: Apologize

    I know we not supposed to re up old posts but I referenced this poem in halo
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    Quote Originally Posted by A Disciple View Post
    I know we not supposed to re up old posts but I referenced this poem in halo
    Would you rather I post a creative writing towards you here on this thread?
    Or would you prefer on your Disciple thread?

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    Either way…
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