Grand - Black Sky Black Death

[MGrand15]

links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...905/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...887/index.html

all feed'll be returned, just drop links. any sort of feedback on this would be great. i just got some real equipment so i'm still trying to figure out how to use it right. let me know what ya'll think of this.

http://soundcloud.com/mikegrand/blac...death-produced


lyrics if you like to read along:
Carve yourself into me please become a part of me
You try to tear yourself away don’t rip your love apart from me
Skies changing turning black like our last moments
Fading I feel psy-cho its breaking off my mind open
Nerves shake like a quake when ya eyes open
Voice stutters fuck up before I know it im frozen
I feel like the sky wont just go blue again
My broken heart is tatted black but instead I use a pen
that’s the only thing freeing me
From this ragged cage that we all call reality
when im writing im just managing my stress
Cause life aint just a bitch shes a damsel in distress
And I cant handle it right now but im practicing my best
and im doing what I can but im stranded on this land
just staring at this black sky
forget about my issues as I past time
she used to push me playfully
but now everytime she does she push the life away from me
soul drifting what more can you take from me
my loves already gone now I got my demons chasing me?
Feeling haunted floors creaking through my nightmares
no reason those demons they don’t fight fair
ghost peeping through my window sill
feeling scared im a grown man but im feeling little still
darkness is consuming me hardships are pursuing me
and often I am losing cause im heartless and its too easy
I might be falling but don’t catch me I don’t want the favor
Where were you when they pushed me? Now you wanna save me
Sky is black death is too I don’t need a savior
Cause it aint gonna change – call me crazy

[Joe Boston]

Overall I liked the verse and delivery u had it seemed a little low the recording of the track. The beat was nice too.

[I-M-E]

vocals are drowning out the beat and the quality isnt too good....beats kinda cool...its on some serious sounding ish....lyrics are good, not really sure if it all fits together haha....delivery is alright, prob be better with better vocal quality... flow needs work...keep upping your quality and flow/delivery....but your not that bad at all man (flows my biggest flaw)

[kaino21]

damn pretty good song and I agree with the others the mixing can be better but still the beat is pretty sick and I like the topic being used

[DeathChamberz]

Beat It was nice but really got boring after awhile need a breakdown or some type of change
I liked the lyrics and the flow on the beat was pretty nice. Didn't like how it was recorded with the doubling of lyrics in the mixed down.

Nice song overall

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[L.E]

Beat is kinda cool.

Quality is ass, but I know the feeling everybody's been there.

Flow is pretty solid though, lyrics are too. Like the reality line.

Could have maybe used a switch up too.

This wasn't bad though man, I suggest getting a better mic. Just makes your sound shit more listenable.

Keep it up.

[J-min]

the beat got some dark vibe to it man

the lyrics are good man flow was iiiight i hear what the others r saying though the vocals are abit higher than the beat man work on the mixing and this will be dope

keep dropping fam

rtf - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...874/index.html

[Fenix]

returnin the favor for you homie.. slow pace ok somethin different.. flow on point for a slow tempo.. sometimes thats hard to do, good shit.. delivery aight.. quality is ok could be a lil better what kinda mic do u use? lyrics good.. "push the life away from me, so im driftin.." diggin the content.. good drop homie

[MGrand15]

thanks guys i really appreciate it yall were helpful, my quality is normally better but the mic acts like a bitch on occasion. i hope you guys enjoyed it though. j-min ill get you back right now.

[Fresh Air]

Returning Feed my dude:::

Overall, delivery seemed ok...flow was on point like some people mentioned....beat goes hard im feelin it.....sounded muddy like ther were clashing frequencies, but overall keep it up shit was pretty tight..

when u get a chance, if u can feed my new instrumental..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...166/index.html