what wrong with his battle verse?

[Premiumm]

this was a battle verse i dropped for YungDosia and lost....i personally thought it was good but apparently it was terrible lol


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want yo ranking points, 10 lines due tomorrow anytime.

ayo..

Dosia will ride men till he imprints a saddle scar
then hop off, get on his knees, an imitate his avatar
an his bars need change so ill give'em plenty coins
your verse is like this battle…your not makin any points*
an this yung kid thinks hes king clamin his thrones big
gets face-palmed an yelled at so much he made it his own sig
an kid thinks hes dope, ill make'em eat his words, digest an L
cuz talkin back to his ma is the only time he was Fresh as Hell
i already know imma win i dont need this queer boys hint
cus i seen the future an i KO this kid….like i was Clairvoyant**


**Clairvoyant - someone who can see the future

[Flo-Rez]

ur only punch is weak, i dont want to have to be told wat u mean i should already know.... its like u popped open a dictionary......
idk keep practicing ull get their......
i dont battle rap im a artist but battle rapping is all about punchlines...
and good punchlines......
i barley use punches but when i do i make shur their good.......
like.....
if i run outa money the next thing is a stick-up.
no love no glove im a call that shit a quick-nut.