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    “Valentine’s Love”




    “There is no remedy for love but to love more.”



    Dear Valentine’s Love,………

    …She was down to Earth like the Devil casted from Heaven…
    …Real love at first site, My heart was snatched in a second…
    …She had that affection, Cold passion romantically essence…
    …So I passed her a present, for both past and the present…
    …I could picture our future: Before and after the question?…
    …Both on the same page, Book marker? on chapter eleven…
    …Put a ring on your finger, Just so it matches the necklace…
    …More then my darling in public You’re my doll I’m a puppet…
    …I’ll make you my honey everytime you call me your muffin…
    …For you? my heart is just pumpin, so sincere in the middle…
    …And I'll always be here, so whipe the tears off your pillow…
    …I’ll just take you and leave, hop on a plane’ to the beach…
    …Toes in the sand, beautiful weather’: only eighty degrees…
    …I feel this sensation to be with you everyday of the week…
    …So if I’m awake I will sleep just so you stay in my dreams…
    …Doesn’t matter what way that I blink if it’s painted unique…
    …Cuz see everything I say or I think reflects from the moon…
    …So when you see a falling star?, That’s a message to you…
    …I'll spend every second with who? You: the love of my life…
    …And if love’s a 4 letter word’ then I’ll think of one that is 5…
    …Every emotion comes from inside before crumbled insight…
    …So the thought of not seein you, Brings blood to my eyes…
    …I give hugs not goodbyes, Cuz I don’t plan on leavin you…
    …I’ll get a hunch on my spine’: So my back is even bruised…
    …You’re my other half no need for two, a benevolent unity…
    …Sent from Heaven an through to me especially beautifully…
    …The perfection of fluency; Is like yesterday’s news to me…
    …Each step as we move u’ll see, steps of the movie scene…
    …Me down on a knee and you? Dressed like a groom’ to be…
    …Blessed as a truly Queen, Yet, except for the future king…
    …You need a necklace or jewlery?, I’m here: For you love!…
    …I’ll open my chest’ pour out my heart and give you a hug…
    …My kisses are sent from above!, Lips? As soft’ as a cloud…
    …So next time I give you one, it’ll lift you off of the ground…
    …Call me officer now, lock me up and throw away the key…
    …Cuz if loving you is wrong?, Who know’s a way to cheat?…
    …If you know the way then lead, See? Each road is a to b…
    …Don’t coast just stay one speed I’ll hope & pray we meet…
    …Mark it on the calendar: cuz it’s better now then a month…
    …And becuase of that now, I can call you Valentine’s Love…

    Signed,
    - February The 14th


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    Last edited by ExDaGawd; August 6th, 2006 at 09:37 PM

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    Last edited by ExDaGawd; August 6th, 2006 at 09:56 PM

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    I liked this peice. Good imagery and emotion. It sent vision's through one's mind. The wording and rhyme scheme was a good choice. The way you structured it was a creative way to do so. The vocab was good as well. Very nice read. If they'res ever anything you need feed on, just ask.

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    Dope....


    …More then my darling in public You’re my doll I’m a puppet…
    …I’ll make you my honey everytime you call me your muffin…

    ^lmao dope

    …My kisses are sent from above!, Lips? As soft’ as a cloud…
    …So next time I give you one, it’ll lift you off of the ground…

    Nice^^


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    Good looks fams.

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    wow trully a dope love piece
    all that emotion builded up in to this wow flow on point good muilts usage i mean you got the essentials of a dope art work man pz respond in my shit werd
    dude this site sucks man come to <a href=
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    No doubt, I'll hit it up...Thanks for the feed.

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    dope.
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    got dayum this shit is fire bruh. Probably the best piece ive seen on this site yet. Good Shit Bruh

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    BUT anyways alll in all this is a hot piece bruh. Keep doin you.

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    …I'll spend every second with who? You: the love of my life…
    …And if love’s a 4 letter word’ then I’ll think of one that is 5…
    …Every emotion comes from inside before crumbled insight…
    …So the thought of not seein you, Brings blood to my eyes…
    …I give hugs not goodbyes, Cuz I don’t plan on leavin you…
    …I’ll get a hunch on my spine’: So my back is even bruised…
    …You’re my other half no need for two, a benevolent unity…
    …Sent from Heaven an through to me especially beautifully…
    …The perfection of fluency; Is like yesterday’s news to me…
    …Each step as we move u’ll see, steps of the movie scene…
    …Me down on a knee and you? Dressed like a groom’ to be…
    …Blessed as a truly Queen, Yet, except for the future king…
    …You need a necklace or jewlery?, I’m here: For you love!…
    …I’ll open my chest’ pour out my heart and give you a hug…
    …My kisses are sent from above!, Lips? As soft’ as a cloud…
    …So next time I give you one, it’ll lift you off of the ground…
    …Call me officer now, lock me up and throw away the key…
    …Cuz if loving you is wrong?, Who know’s a way to cheat?…
    …If you know the way then lead, See? Each road is a to b…
    …Don’t coast just stay one speed I’ll hope & pray we meet…
    …Mark it on the calendar: cuz it’s better now then a month…
    …And becuase of that now, I can call you Valentine’s Love…

    ^^
    liked this whole part deep in emotion and metas was kool in many way's possible!.

    She was down to Earth like the Devil casted from Heaven…
    …Real love at first site, My heart was snatched in a second…
    …She had that affection, Cold passion romantically essence…
    …So I passed her a present, for both past and the present…
    …I could picture our future: Before and after the question?…
    …Both on the same page, Book marker? on chapter eleven…
    …Put a ring on your finger, Just so it matches the necklace…

    ^^
    your beginning was nice but didnt catch me right away but later on like 3rd line got me.....

    this was nice and very well written and nice to see your back into writing my dude..
    overall this was nice love piece!.


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    Thanks alot for the critique, Yea I'ma start droppin more now hopefully, Tryin to get this one into the Om HOF, I'll get back at everyone who dropped links in here....

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    well i just made a new one so leave feed on that one its the last link in my sig called picture perfect my dude!>
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    Upppin.

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