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    The Land Of Heartache

    The Land Of Heartache
    By: *~Big Nash~*


    It Begins..

    ..I'm Kin to the thin atmosphere that they put here,
    Soon I hear noises of the things that I fear dear,
    But mere shadows flunk me. Like marshy meddows,
    Last time anything was real it belonged to Jaeppeto,
    But Let go, as soon as faces become firmiliar..see,
    If heartache is past, IT MEANS YOU CAN'T HELP ME,
    To a degree you think that glee comes naturally..
    But fly's are the only ones..
    ..Who think that this crap's Satisfactory,
    Man of my dreams won't come back to me. So I cry,
    Notice how heartache BRINGS the attention? But why?
    Their sympathy balled up into a lie, you get nothing,
    Sadness creates sadness. That's not even bluffing..
    Isn't that something? Pains in vein, it brings rain..
    It's the favorite named weather in this sad sad game,
    It's all the same. But similarities are only partials..
    ..Tears 'Sink' in war, kind of like U.S. 'Marsh'alls,
    This IS the land of heartache. Compared to some,
    He looks at the bottom of his shoes..
    ..and even he knows where I've come from,
    I'm a crumb, a mere partical. Small as a molecule,
    Americas got HALF my slogan, the Proud and FEW,
    The aching sticks like glue. But you knew I was there,
    I'm honest, like theme park sub-names. I 'State Fair',
    But you don't care. Life Proves itself to be unfair,
    People shot in the head everyday..
    ..They all make that same exact 'Blank stare',
    The Land of heartache brings natural earthquakes..
    You realize that pain is the thing thoughts of God takes,
    His hands makes nails, but his message always fails..
    ..Let's get on this vessel and know that heartache sails


    ..Jesus dies

    Get my message..Grasp it..and just..

    ...Think


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    Last edited by Cody Nash; January 21st, 2006 at 06:44 PM

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    hmmmmm.....nice drop man...im feeling this dont quite get it but i feel it... pretty complex thinking right there man... def. nice shit

    retern the favore for my drops called obsene mother fuckers..

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    shit b. that was dope man. we should collab again. seems like youve upped huge on your work. the wordplay was dope in this entire piece. you kept the structure and flow consistent and strong. the imagery was insane in conjunction with the description. Overall this is one of the best pieces here at this time b. 9.5/10
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    Good Piece..there was a lot of metaphors in this homie, that was dope.

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    Thanks for positive feed..Upp

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    Omg..stupid, don't let this die

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    Wow... this was nice... very complex.
    Flow was on point, vocab was good & used very well, wordplay was nice & the imagery was good.
    This was just a good OM in general.



    It would be much appreciated if you could drop a quick vote here:
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    ^Will do later..g2g atm, thanks for feed..

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    This was a decent read for sure. I enjoyed the message, and it sure got accross perfectly. I liked the meta you used in this piece, good job. Keep it coming.

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    WOW. nice drop Nash, love ya work. keep it up
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    Yo I was realling feeling this piece right here dude. Like others I wasn't quite sure what you were aiming for but other than that it was a pretty good drop. Your flow seemed fairly decent, and your structure was good. I enjoyed it..

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    This was a good drop, real good topic, good use of vocabs, and really felt the imagery.
    keep it up homey lookin to see more from you
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