my life is a complete waste
i allways hesitate
constantly debate
shall i dare choose my own fate
i think not
ive got so much to be sought
but pain is whats brought
i shall never know the joy of happiness again
never the joy of true friends
no it shall not depend on my ends
if it does then i must say fuck it
life is pointless so i say fuck it................
short sweet straight to the point i did it on my cell phone in the notes section thats why it looks like that*edit=fixed it a little*
Last edited by ~lextownkillaz~; November 16th, 2005 at 03:37 PM
i would like feedback on this peice also....................
cza the layout it was hard to read so it took me a couple of reads to undertsand in n get the rythm, i ddnt like it at 1st but aftr my 3rd read of it i startd 2 feel it, but even tho u intended it 2 be short n sweet i reckon it woulda beeb btr if there was some imagery or elaboration on how u feel. i thought it was gd
thanx for the feedback...................i want some more
come on ppl i would like some more feed back than just one person
i know that anyone who posts feed on this will get feed on any peice of there choice in return
Was wack. Needs structure, flow, concept, and needs to atleast contain basics. Hope I didn't offend you.
P.S.: I really don't like you. Fake ass.. "thugs".
uppin for more feedback**.................................
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