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This is pretty good, the commas there kinda through off the flow even though i know they where there to keep it on point, every bar never ceased to rhyme, the premise of the verse was kinda played but the lyrics kept it up, overall 7/10.
the camas mean its emotion dummy
and how did i not rhyme i use hudred of multiples maybe you should read my peice instead of the fake feed. idiot.
wow, this was hotttttttttttttttttt! keep this coming, i luved it!
Yea the multis were good but I just dont like shakespearan rap songs...I mean if u like to get emotional and cry when u write it..thats fine but come on...If u recorded that and played it...people would think u were some depressed bastard who had no life...
Anyways it was a good drop, nice multis...keep it up..positivity is what im here for
Dont take this as hating on u...its an opinion...dont start pm whorin me for this or makin diss songs about me caz u though this shit was dope and I say it was eh
I'm that nigga who can kill u in 8 bars
this was pretty good man, nice to see you are in fact elevating
uh, my criticism, i didn't think you stayed consistent, with vocab anyways....you had some really nice areas, where you expressed yourself very nicely, but then other parts that had shabby vocab which dulled it down a little....also, grammatical errors kinda threw off the flow, choppy sentances
but, overall, it was a pretty good piece man, long and thoughout....had nice emotion, good imagery....you're gettin better man, keep up for sure
fav lines....
"But no matter what the water never pushes me Harder
I’ll be defending myself cause I got the key to my Armor
All the lies can be lies, I’m still going to act Sarcastic
It seems like a habit, I cant surpass it and react Erratic"
i thought the first one was pretty cool/creative....second one just sounded and was dope, because i act like that too, haha
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well if i recorded this. i woudlnt because it wouldnt flow right. when i write my lyrics for audios my lines shorter and i use barley any multiples. all i do is use vocab
but anyway uppin
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