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[Mesmerize]

I mirror my wounds by healing them with dreams
Only screams scab over into unyielding streams
That overflows deep within my veins, in pain
Numbing realitys ways of scattered days of vain
Rain evaporates by the breath of a blissful haze
Cause days phase this tempted suicidal craze
Exhaling responsibility into a nothingness’ crowd
Some how I escaped anxiety’s wrathful shroud
Frightened that one-day, I might not be so fortunate
And will have to face reality’s way of torturin it
Then time snaps and loses it balance
Shall chance consider life’s foul trance?
Dance with this smoke and choke out the truth
Escape where you mind is able to reach its youth
Quittings for losers about says it all
Cause if I quit it now, then ive quit it all
Falls frozen to winter, and left a splinter trapped
Ive tapped in Gods green and didn’t react

[SMZ]

meter seemed a bit odd in a couple spots - overall the word choice was interesting - I liked the opening line and most of the second half of this - especially:

Then time snaps and loses its balance
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Quittings for losers about says it all
Cause if I quit it now, then ive quit it all

coo piece - had a cognizant sorrowfulness feel to it..

[Mesmerize]

thanks homie

[Telekinetic]

Upping for Mez
Good shit though.
word life to an absurd knife
now my third wifes merked...sike
... and yea im just that dope

[Mesmerize]

upping......

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.