strictly for tha ladies--tha complete version can i get some replies.

[sILLable]

this is for tha ladies


uh yea

ya frame is sexy,almost made me loose it//
applyin warm kisses to your inner thighs while i groove it//
tongue slide down ya belly my passion ive prooven//
cant wait to make ya pussy loosen//
tongue sweeps past ya shaven crotch//
you watch as my tongue works and you get hot//
u confess im tha best,drawn my tongues attention to your breasts//
nipples caressed,this aint a test//
this is heat of sex,words perplex my dicks like a hex//
it puts one on ya and ya cant stop takin it//
ya back im gladly breakin it,tha bed still shaken-shit//
now my tongue glides to your neck,while i penetrate you keepin tha moans in check//
gettin heavier as were thrustin,lustin to keep kissin and touchin//
now my finger circles your clit as i stay pushin wit my dick//
i bend you over and slide in deeper,take a break after a while so i can roll some reefer, sounds dont pound louder than us from tha speaker, break my beeper so it quits goin off//
this dank shit makin me cough//
now its tha heat of tha moment,best to jump on it//
insertion from behind,your climax continues to climb,fuckin and fuckin just to hear you whine//
you clame your mine, rake me wit nails, even blind i could read you like brail//
tha passion come close and you cum bitin my ear,,i cum simultaneously fightin tha tear//
heavy breathin now tha anticipations over,,but im still waitin , so lets fuck till were sober// havin sex till were sleepin,your slit is still leakin, and my dick is still peakin, and thats just tha weekend.

[Miss Behaving]

LMAO@for the ladies.

Me thinks someone had an interesting time lol... The sex theme is kind of played out unless you have a twist in it (no I DONT mean it like that! lol) but not a bad drop could use a bit of structural adjustment.

To improve it id suggest a little work on the flow, as in making the lines similar sizes (size matters!) to help keep a rhymic beat to it (that works on SOOOOO many levels )

[Mesmerize]

Sorry man, but I didnt even finish reading it. Girls dont like to hear that shit, lol. That was back in the 90's. BUT from what I read, excluding the fact that it was about sex, um it was an alright drop. Keep it up man....peace.

[Mesmerize]

I dont mean to sound bitchy man, just keepin it real with you.

[sILLable]

well most younger girls cant appreciate tha fact that forms of art such as poetic type things can depict sex and even though its graphic most females see tha point, younger girl are still immature and they thinkk oooh hes funny or oooh forbidden to talk about sex, but welcome to tha real word were girls like sex after childhood females like sex and its a graphic piece yes, but it depicts personal emotions and feelings,and it depicts something that all normal people do,SEX.~1~

[Mesmerize]

Okay for one thing, Im not a teenager. Im 20 and am over that sex phase shit like most adults. And yes I love sex. I have it everynight with my man thank you very much. So dont go making accusations on people just because they dont like your shit. And yes, you did portray deep emotions and feelings and I give you props for that. Anything that you can depict your emotions in depth is an art. Its just that people are tired of reading about it, not the fact that they dont like sex, its just something that has been played out a little too much. So chill man, its alright. Im sure there are others who will enjoy this.

[Mantra]

classic thread title..rofl
this was a text porno...
some quotables...

take a break after a while so i can roll some reefer

strait gangstah yo!!

havin sex till were sleepin,your slit is still leakin

dope imagery

i cum simultaneously fightin tha tear//

use a pussy...lmao

[sILLable]

thanks for tha replies