Islam: My Perspective

[The Beat Mod]

dopeeeeeee. all I gotta say. Real nice use of this concept.
Enjoyed reading. Vocabulary was good too.

I think we can all agree, the best part of this is the way that you expressed yourself using your words. Very deep...and I'm guessing that this is a topic that u've actually taken the time to think out...and then just put something raw on paper.

Very good please. Only thing I must take note of is your flow...Your bars have too many syllables man...If you try and spit that outloud...unless your twista or sumthin...Your not gonna hit those.

A secret i've learned in rap...try to hit 12-14 syllables every line you make. no matter how bad the line is, people will think it's hot just because of that lol.

Keep your head up. good drop.

[Judge Judy]

lol I will.
If ya look at most of my lines they are 12-14
Thats not a secret..thats just trade

[Koalatee]

Awesome topic, content was mediocre, writing was alright. Good job.

[Judge Judy]

lol cheers for the total breakdown. Guess ya needed some links
to post in your open mic?
This more audio aimed.
pz

[Haywood Jewblomi]

I really liked this piece. It had a very nice rhyme scheme and was very easy flowing. it also touched on a point very important to the world at large nowadays without being one sided or judgmental, which is very refreshing to see. Used some very good vocabulary, but at the same time made it look liek the long words were supposed to be there. Occasionally you get people using long words just for the hell of it, so this was good to see. Overall a very nice piece. If you can, can you check out my current piece. It's at http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120526. Thanks.

[Judge Judy]

Thanx for the feedbk.
I'll peep ya links soon.

[Osirus]

nice work bro...

a nice breath of fresh air..

quite a delicate topic, but i totaly agree with what your trying to say here...

really creative...its inspires me..

9/10..

keep droppin knowledge bro...

peace
one

[Judge Judy]

uppin