Re: Emotional Board Meeting
lol This was great. I really liked the conversation between the brain and the heart.
I liked your rhymes and you have a great knack for story telling.
This was quite different and refreshing to read.
Got some great lines in this piece. Heaps of good lines actually.
"try a more asshole approach, you see NICE guys finish last"
heart stepped in, "what's more important, true love or some ass?"
I like the way it closes too.
"the gains were minimal at best this leaves me with a strategical notion
looks like its time for my brain to get that deep seated promotion."
Keep it coming Narrator.
Great read.
Re: Emotional Board Meeting
Welcome Narrator, hope you enjoy this site as much as I do. This piece reminds me of how I used to write when I was younger and 'looking for love'. This whole piece flowed like water to me. Like it came straight from the heart with the brain guiding it perfectly to the page/screen. My favorite bar was;
'he said " im sincerely sorry for all the pain that ive caused
but i really can't help it with all the dames that ive crossed'
any guy can relate to this and you worded this like a lyrical messiah. The last bar is closed out this masterpiece with the intelligence and insight gained during the 'meeting'. Not sure how old you are but as you get to be my age and your testosterone chills out, you start putting your thinking before your emotion. I can relate to this piece on every aspect, hope to read more of your work soon keep it coming.