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Pondering upon a ponder.
Pondering upon a ponder
Letting my mind wander
I ponder upon a ponder
Thinking of a thought
That my mind brought
Filled with silent words
And filled with silent verbs
My mind roams the unseen
Seeing a joyous scene
Like two doves flying by
Maybe fireworks like July
Pondering on the things
That my mind brings
I am high on my mind
Without a care I can find
I rewind all of my past
And watch my life pass
Again before my eyes
All the hellos, & the good byes
Seeing all my birthdays
Now knowing im worth praise
I pondered upon a thought
And that’s what my ponder brought
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this was koo..nice to see you traveled over now and expanding from TXT AND OM TO POEMS..my dude..nice drop though the vocab could have been better and the wording in this was sorta forced...but the vocab was very limited..idk i guess im used to reading complexed pieces that now thats what i like to see but seeing as you rarely drop poetry thiswasa decent drop wyte....kep writing and try getting more into your emotion and metaphorical phrases could help a bit man...
nice drop though
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short lines, cool title, good message nice way to end it to bad it wasn't longer, needs emotion and metahors are good in poetry i knoe you knoe hoe to use them i've seen it before pretty aright vocab could have been better but still cool nice drop
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=314706
peep this
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pretty good wyte. u have changed on sum real shit. u used 2 just b gfx then u expanded 2 text, then OMs, now Poetry wuts next...AUDIO?? but as far as the poem this was pretty good. nice lines. could have used sum more imagery in it but w/e it was still good
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RTF homie. samantha C. hensley
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Thanks For The Feed, Upping.
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Vocab could have been more elaborate...and some lines were random in the poem, but other than that..It was a good key...Lines were short which were ok, structure was neat..The story you told about your thoughts and pondering could have been a little more in depth, but it was overall a good key
*Dont know how to judge a poem*
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i'd say you have a little bit of a style like Jean Grae going in the poem... a bit ironic tho cuz she is like a really conscious rapper n all... but I really like it