Life's Signs

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...11#post4719511
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=301429

Do you believe in a Greater Force? Ancient Lore..
that there is somebody that Created ya Fate and Form?
and Awaits Always Awake Makeing Sure..
Everything he made Stays the Same like Pain n Gore
What if he Came ta Earth and Proclaimed the Worst
would you look the other Way not ready ta Substain the Cure
God please point out the correct Path ta Pick..
Status Advances..to Catholic.. ta Can't Exist
And in a Instant, the whole civilization become's Extinct
my Instinct Within, lettin' of Adrenaline, that got you knowin' if Heaven Exist's
Never Ending Dreams turn Dramatically, from Mental Insanity..
Ta turnin NightMares ta Reality, I Cry Tears of Malice that Surpasses Grief
Imagine Me..Traveling' at Maximum Speed, inta the Ballad of the Deceased
Sadness Crafted Bad-Habits of Havoc, Madness Expanded ta be Disastrous
Tired of Being Obssesed and Feeling Regret in these Seasons of Stress
the Beast in my Chest, Leaves me Possessed ta Seeming Upset

ok this was koo nice flow and ish....your structure though was off a bit and the complexity was meh my dude i felt this could have been donw way way ebetter from you but meh nice read though but work on cathin my attention more i felt kinda bored readin it


RTF on the link in the sig

thanks for your insight, uppin this for more opinions

how cum i neva get no luv shits fuckin annoying uppin this shit

this peice was ok, i wasnt really feeling the whole topic much though, and the rhyme sceme you used just seem to be a little forced.. and yea nothing really caught my eye here, it was decent, but nothing special... your flow was a bit off point in some places and your structure was because of that.. your vocab here was pretty nice tho.. but the content behind that didnt appeal to me..
it was decent...

thats all.

word sum much wanted critcisim, anyway uppin this and i'll guarntee ta blow ur mind next time

this peice was basic. Ok rhymeskeme and flow. Ok imagenary. No creativty with basic structre. I didnt see any real internals or methaphors which hurts you in the readers eyes. I thought this could have been better. But you chose a great topic with a ok peice. 5-10. Sorry. Still make sigs?

word still uppin this for sum more comments..